My wishes for the future
People have a lot of wishes in their life. As a human, I have my own wish. My wishes can be about the past, the present and the future. After many years, I have realized that I cannot change the past or even the present; but I can change my future. My wishes for the future life are being successful in career, having a happy life and working as an animal protector.
To be successful in career, I can earn a lot of money to improve my living condition. Besides that, I will get the respect from colleagues because of my excellent achievements. And I will not worry about being unemployed if a lay-off occurs.
It is lucky to have a happy life. I will do whatever I want, travel to many beautiful places to make friend with other people and learn about interesting things in the world. My future life will be full of pleasure and positive thinking.
The reason why I want to be an animal protector in the future is that I would save many animals from being abused or being killed. It is my hope to see people around me treating well with animals. They should be treated as humans' best friends for everything that they have contributed to human.
In summary, although I have a lot of wishes throughout my younger life, but I really want to succeed in career, live happily and work as an animal protector in the future. And I will try my best to achieve these wishes instead of waiting for a miracle.
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