The table below shows how young people in Tokyo Japan listened to music over the previous month The pie chart shows a record company s international findings about whether people preferred live or recorded music Summarize the information by selecting and

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The table below shows how young people in Tokyo, Japan, listened to music over the previous month. The pie chart shows a record company’s international findings about whether people preferred live or recorded music.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table demonstrates the proportion of people in the capital of Japan who listened to music in the last month in different ways such as using MP3-players, Internet, CDs, or listened to live music and the pie chart reveals the percentage of people who were engrossed in live or recorded music and some who had no idea about their preferences.

The table shows evidently that about two out of three people who were absorbed in live music were men and 44% of them had the opposite sex. Also a massive 79% of many who were big fans of MP3-players were males and two in five of them were females. Moving to the usage of Internet, just over half of listeners were accounted by women and about two of five of them were made up by men. The last group of people who were interested in using CDs was included by a tiny 19% and 22% of men and women respectively.

Turning to the pie chart, an overwhelming majority of people (70%) were passionate about live music and 26% and 4% of them were enthusiastic about recorded music and had no idea about their eagerness respectively.

In a nutshell, in contrast to women, men were more interested in music except for the final group that the proportion of women was a bit huger. Nevertheless, most people preferred live music to other inks.

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and 44% of them had the opposite sex.
Description: 'them' refers to what? Be sensitive to use pronoun.

men were more interested in music except for the final group
Description: what refers to 'the final group'?

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