You are going on a short course to a training college abroad It is a college that you have not been to before Write a letter to the accommodation officer In your letter give details of your course and your arrival departure date explain your accommodation

Essay topics:

You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is a college that you have not been to before.
Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter,
• give details of your course and your arrival/departure date
• explain your accommodation needs
• ask for information about getting to and from the college

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to you enquire about accommodation for short term in your hostel. Currently, I am pursuing MBA degree at Cal State University. I have been selected for short course on management skills in Quincy college. My short course will start on 1st September and will end on 31st December. I will be in the UK on 25 August and I will be leaving on 2nd January.

I need accommodation starting from 25th August to 5th January. It should have independent bathroom and study room. It would be very nice if student living with me should have to study similar course. I really need independent room so at least I can study quietly.

I also need more information about transportation from college to the hostel as I see it is little far from college. Would it possible to go to college using public transport? Would you provide any transport service for students from college to the hostel?

I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours faithfully,
Peter Allison

Votes
Average: 6.8 (14 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, really, so, at least

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 4.92783505155 264% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.03092783505 0% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 32.9175257732 67% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 825.0 937.175257732 88% => OK
No of words: 174.0 206.0 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74137931034 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63192868298 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72620441529 2.54303337028 107% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 127.690721649 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.626436781609 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 246.6 290.88556701 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 16.3608247423 73% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 21.4258331584 44.8134815571 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 58.9285714286 76.5299724578 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.4285714286 16.8248392259 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.57142857143 4.34317383033 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 3.94845360825 279% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196619811766 0.216113520407 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0656475691155 0.0766984524023 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0599576658545 0.0603063233224 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0892947964741 0.12726935374 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0499813511517 0.0580467560999 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.1 8.37731958763 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.22 70.7449484536 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 7.45979381443 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.32 8.71597938144 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.95 7.59969072165 91% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 41.2886597938 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 8.62886597938 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.8 8.54432989691 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.2247191011 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.25 Out of 9
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