Nowadays celebrities earn more money than politicians. What are the reasons for this? Is it a positive or negative development?
These days, luminaries are more profitable in comparison with political representatives than ever before because of some reason. While some people may assume such a trend negative, I suppose it would be a desirable change.
There are several reasons why luminaries make better money compared to political people. The biggest one among them is because today not a few people in the world are living in a capitalistic economy, where the more productive you are, the more rewarded you should be. In this regard, it is evident that the former is more rewarding than the latter since they contribute sales of any products or services by playing the role of advertisers in all kinds of media for their sponsors’ profit, for instance. another major reason for this is the growing global concern over irrationally high remuneration for lawmakers, which can easily lead to public discontent, or worse, corruption(26). In response to such criticism, the reformation of the remuneration system for legislators is recently underway in some governments around the world, generally resulting in a downward trend of the amount on average.
Opinions on this development may vary, but I personally believe that it would be a preferable development in general as stated below. First of all, as I mentioned above, it is quite natural and rational that, in today’s world where capitalism is hegemonic, someone making values and contributing the market should be entitled to be financially rewarded. More specifically, if the people in the private sector like celebrities would be paid less than the ones in the public sector like politicians in spite of their productivity, this would demoralize them, not only causing economic stagnation but also losing social vitality as a whole. For another thing, if we admit the multi-million-dollar paycheques to politicians, it will definitely add burdens on our national finance. this is especially true in today’s world, where the numbers of the population are gradually decreasing, and in turn, so are the amounts of tax revenues. In fact, some of the local parliaments in Japan, for example, have decided that their members are completely voluntary, receiving no reward.
In conclusion, I believe this development, deriving from a couple of reasons mentioned above, would be acceptable when considering our economic regime and financial situation.
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2015.0 1615.20841683 125% => OK
No of words: 377.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34482758621 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09561458888 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 176.041082164 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602122015915 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 658.8 506.74238477 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.2979687173 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.928571429 106.682146367 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9285714286 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.2142857143 7.06120827912 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223803129544 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0695748148559 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0472806689396 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12018827798 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0518818392063 0.056905535591 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.04 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 78.4519038076 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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