whether or not someone achieves their aim is mostly by a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Essay topics:

whether or not someone achieves their aim is mostly by a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Everyone has some goals in their life. Some people believe that it is all due to their luck if they can reach to their target or not. While others think that it is all contributed by hard work and being focus to their goals. I strongly agree that hard work and struggle is a key to achieve someone,s target. This essay will elaborate these factors with some examples.

Firstly, I believe that hard work and strong efforts are the key features of someone,s success. People can set their goals and it is best to stay focused and try their best for their targets. For instance some kids from poor families can become doctors or engineers . They study hard and reach to their target by their own effort. Good education and struggle can change their luck. In the same way sibling from same background have different achievements in their life. So to reach to someone,s target it is very crucial to stay focused and work hard. Nothing is impossible in the world. Continous effort and work hard can change luck.

Secondly, to achieve someone,s goal proper planning and better use of resources is a key feature too. For example, if someone sets up their goal to be a doctor , it is important to choose appropriate subjects and proper planning. Recently with the advent of technology there are a lot of useful resources. It is very important to make proper planning and reach to the target. It is important not to waste time too. People can take advantage of other peoples experience too. Internet computers are helping tools too. So if people know what they are planning and then get proper information,they can achieve their goals easily. So it is not the luck it is all by choice.

In conclusion, anyone can change their fate. Working hard and staying focused is important to achieve targets. Proper planning and making use of available resources are also important contributing factors to achieve goals.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in the same way

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1577.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79331306991 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49684314335 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471124620061 0.561755894193 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 480.6 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 16.0721442886 162% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.2975951904 59% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.5229621642 49.4020404114 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 60.6538461538 106.682146367 57% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.6538461538 20.7667163134 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73076923077 7.06120827912 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 8.67935871743 196% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152059478149 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0466674388239 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0420319854928 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103823873691 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0185242977892 0.056905535591 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.5 13.0946893788 57% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 50.2224549098 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 11.3001002004 60% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.61 12.4159519038 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.06 8.58950901804 82% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.1190380762 67% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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