In many countries, prison is the most common solution for crimes. However, many think that better education is the most effective way to prevent people from committing further crime.
To what extent do you agree or disagree.
The world in which we live is full of people with shady character and broken moral compasses. Therefore, a manifold number of crimes are committed every day. While it is a universal practice to imprison criminals, many people opine that education has ampler effects in preventing crime. Although I concur that higher emphasis should be placed on educating the masses, I am not convinced that the imprisonment of criminals should be ceased.
On the one hand, the advantages of education are irrefutable. First and foremost, inculcating the masses prevents the majority of criminal acts to occur in the first place. To elaborate, by teaching the younger generations regarding the damages these acts cause both to the individual and society, many of them may avoid joining gangs. Moreover, decreasing the number of criminals as a cause of edification will eliminate a superfluous burden that is on government’s shoulder. To illustrate, take the cost of having prisoners in custody as an example. Statistics show that imprisonment of every individual adds 7 thousand dollars to the local cost of states.
On the other hand, having amenities such as prisons have a plethora of benefits. The first and perhaps the most lucrative point is that they isolate criminals from other people; thence, not only preventing them from committing a crime, but also eliminating their influence on law abiding citizens that may pivot to the criminal life. Furthermore, the very idea of imprisonment prevents many people from embarking criminal missions. To illustrate, a study shows that after introducing capital punishments such as life imprisonment, the rate of crime gradually dropped to the half of the initial number. Last but not least, prisons are places that detainees can reflect on past behaviors and atone.
To recapitulate, on the basis of the aforementioned explanation, I admittedly agree that teaching people can prevent many people from committing a crime, however, prisons’ role in this is irrefutable as well.
Comments
Correction:
Correction:
2nd body paragraph --> pivot toward criminal life
2nd body paragraph --> embarking on criminal missions.
2nd body paragraph --> strenuous punishments
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, then, therefore, well, while, such as, in the first place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1707.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.334375 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05716212105 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584375 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.581447239 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.6875 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.8125 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230657589209 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0673837677692 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0738370476936 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151947644902 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0702340424314 0.056905535591 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.61 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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