In many countries the proportion of older people is steadily increasing Some think this is good while others believe this is a problem for a country Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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In many countries, the proportion of older people is steadily increasing. Some think this is good, while others believe this is a problem for a country. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

The average age of a country's population is significantly important. While it is believed by some people that old population is more beneficial for a country because this way the government is less burdened, others assert this trend causes serious challenges such as workforce scarcity.

One aspect which some people claim is advantageous if a large proportion of society consists of older generations can be identified as less responsibility for the government. When the majority of the public is old, the superfluous burden of allocating budgets to programs such as edification and maternity will be lifted from government's shoulder, allowing this capital to be to be assigned to improving other existing schemes such as health care and transportation, which in turn allows the masses to have a higher quality of life. Statistics show that Sweden, for instance, is considered number one in quality of life among European counties because their government is able to shift funds to spend on qualitative programs due to the fact that more than 78 percent of their population are 55 or older. However, other people put forward contradictory arguments.

Another angle on this argument suggests having an old population will cause a serious problem. An aged populace will lead to a shortage of workforce, preventing companies from being able to recruit young workers, which in turn will result in numerous financial problems that might cripple the society. Canada, for example, is currently suffering from an old majority whose inability to work has led to a 9 percent drop in GDP last year. The Canadian government thus is forced to encourage foreigners to immigrate to their country. This evidence illustrates the principal drawback of having a large proportion of elders in society.

To conclude, it is clear that having a large number of senior citizens may temporarily raise the quality of life, however, I believe this trend jeopardizes the country's economy in the long run due to human resource shortages.

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Average: 8.2 (2 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: to be
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1695.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23148148148 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95895272598 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58950617284 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.7193678728 49.4020404114 178% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.25 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187487463481 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069608369046 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0584657853153 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115652882317 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0454973307025 0.056905535591 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.0 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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