The article in health magazine claims that the people of certain city are adopting more healthful lifestyles. But this claim is based on several assumptions that need to be further backed up by specific evidences and study. Consideration of more measures of health; further evaluation and fact check of survey report and evaluation of similar examples is necessary to reach the conclusion.
First and foremost, the author has considered data from eating habits as a sole measure of health. Healthy lifestyle includes plethora of factors beside eating habits. Proper exercise, adequate sleep, regular eating interval, healthy working hours and correct posture while sitting can be few among many factors that determine how healthy a person's life besides proper food and nutrition. A persons food requirement also depends on the work type, working hours, exercise and eating interval. For instance, calorie requirement of a manual labor can be much higher than that of a person working in information technology sector. Protein requirement of a gym freak can be much higher than those who do not exercise regularly. failing to consider other factors that affect nutritional requirement and considering eating habits as sole measure of health does not ascertain that people are living healthier life.
Secondly, response of a survey is considered as representative of their eating habit. It is true that most people give honest responses regarding their eating habits. However, for most people, their eating habit is not regular and the pattern with which they eat high calorie, high protein, unhealthy or high alcohol diet is further erratic. Citizens do not correctly keep track of the parties they attend, festivals they celebrate and the minor events in which they booze whole night, mostly eating unhealthy diet. Further, most of the outliers tend to fake their eating habits in order to keep themselves within the trend. Thus the data taken from survey needs further analysis in order to ascertain citizens eating habits.
Finally, the author considers consumption pattern of two foods to bolster evidence of healthy eating habit. Decreased sale of Sulia, a product used by most healthy individuals does not relate at any way to better healthy lifestyle. Another evidence, fourfold increase in sale of products containing kiran can be related to healthier lifestyle but this evidence does not clearly mention that this fourfold increase is for eating. There can be multiple uses of these foods and consumers might be using these items for other purposes than eating. further, fourfold consumption of food item does not necessarily mean healthier. People might have overused that food item, leading to grave consequences. These both evidences are not convincing to reach specified conclusion. Thus, further analysis regarding sales record of more food item is neccesary to reach conlusion.
In this way, the argument as it stands now must be analyzed further with proper evidences to come to conclusion. Evidences as mentioned above are pre-requisite to reach the conclusion. Further research and preparation of evidence will help evaluate wheather or not people are adopting healthier lifestyle.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 502 350
No. of Characters: 2644 1500
No. of Different Words: 254 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.733 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.267 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.595 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 219 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 161 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 107 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.08 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.347 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.48 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.288 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.288 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.116 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 341, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...ny factors that determine how healthy a persons life besides proper food and nutrition....
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Line 2, column 391, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...fe besides proper food and nutrition. A persons food requirement also depends on the wo...
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Line 2, column 723, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Failing
...an those who do not exercise regularly. failing to consider other factors that affect n...
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Line 3, column 626, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...er to keep themselves within the trend. Thus the data taken from survey needs furth...
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Line 3, column 663, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d. Thus the data taken from survey needs further analysis in order to ascertain c...
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Line 4, column 545, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Further
...e items for other purposes than eating. further, fourfold consumption of food item does...
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Line 4, column 739, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'reaching'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'convince' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: reaching
...These both evidences are not convincing to reach specified conclusion. Thus, further ana...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for instance, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2703.0 2260.96107784 120% => OK
No of words: 502.0 441.139720559 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38446215139 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67133553771 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 204.123752495 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51593625498 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 845.1 705.55239521 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.7277757148 57.8364921388 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.111111111 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5925925926 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.40740740741 5.70786347227 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195082596671 0.218282227539 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0564959568886 0.0743258471296 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.056808916263 0.0701772020484 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0993818340848 0.128457276422 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0790288828377 0.0628817314937 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 98.500998004 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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