During the past year workers at our newly opened factory reported 30 percent more on the job accidents than workers at nearby Panoply Industries Panoply produces products very similar to those produced at our factory but its work shifts are one hour s

The following appeared in memo from vice president of a manufacturing company. The author made an assumption on the basis of expert view. The expert suggest that the major accident may happen due to lack of fatigue and sleep deprivation among the worker. There several other reason for on job accident which author may taken into consideration. Before this memo implemented analyze an argument in details.

Firstly, The authors compare the ratio of on job accident with Panoply Industries. Out of which 30 percent job accident happen, the author not provide statistical data of previous year and current year. Whether this accident ration may remain same or vary, worker who are working for previous year may work for same. If new worker are joined and are not well educated then incident may occur.If company may lack due to provide training, instruction to worker may fail to increase in accident.

Secondly, author made assumption that Panoply Produces product, rather there working shift are one hour shorter even though they, have less percentage of job accident. author can't take fact that experience matter in huge way. Panoply industries may work in shift and there shift hours also differ. Worker who working in Panoply may work from long year ago. They may have strong skills, techniques that gives more productivity. rather worker of Panoply industries may work in very smart way. so it's advantage point for panoply industries.

Thirdly, on basis of expert view the authors made assumption that fatigue and sleep deprivation is key point for job accidents. The only reason of fatigue and sleep deprivation are not reason for on job accident. There several reason such as if worker have not idea about machine and still working, using smart phone at time of work which may divert his mind from working.

Lastly, Author assume that if panoply safety records can attributed to shorter work shift, which allow worker to get adequate amount of rest. this will also give same result in our manufacturing company. Instead of just reducing shift hours and giving an adequate amount of rest may not result in on job accident or increase in productivity.

To sum up with this, several thing which the author may take in to consideration. Due lack evidence assumption become weaken the argument.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 139, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...assumption on the basis of expert view. The expert suggest that the major accident ...
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Line 1, column 320, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[3]
Message: Did you mean 'take' or 'be taken'?
Suggestion: take; be taken
...on for on job accident which author may taken into consideration. Before this memo im...
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Line 1, column 346, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ch author may taken into consideration. Before this memo implemented analyze an argume...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: If
...t well educated then incident may occur.If company may lack due to provide trainin...
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Line 5, column 169, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Author
..., have less percentage of job accident. author cant take fact that experience matter i...
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Line 5, column 176, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...less percentage of job accident. author cant take fact that experience matter in hug...
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Suggestion: Rather
...echniques that gives more productivity. rather worker of Panoply industries may work i...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: rather,
...echniques that gives more productivity. rather worker of Panoply industries may work i...
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Line 5, column 492, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
... industries may work in very smart way. so its advantage point for panoply industr...
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Line 7, column 220, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reason seems to be countable; consider using: 'several reasons'.
Suggestion: several reasons
...e not reason for on job accident. There several reason such as if worker have not idea about m...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 143, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
... worker to get adequate amount of rest. this will also give same result in our manuf...
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Line 11, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... increase in productivity. To sum up with this, several thing which the autho...
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Line 11, column 23, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun thing seems to be countable; consider using: 'several things'.
Suggestion: several things
...productivity. To sum up with this, several thing which the author may take in to conside...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thirdly, well, such as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 19.6327345309 31% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1931.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 380.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08157894737 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52392842241 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489473684211 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.4404301051 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.4583333333 119.503703932 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8333333333 23.324526521 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95833333333 5.70786347227 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237825368324 0.218282227539 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0713645227688 0.0743258471296 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.065027742888 0.0701772020484 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112698838582 0.128457276422 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0856773822166 0.0628817314937 136% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 14.3799401198 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.3550499002 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 139, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...assumption on the basis of expert view. The expert suggest that the major accident ...
^^^
Line 1, column 320, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[3]
Message: Did you mean 'take' or 'be taken'?
Suggestion: take; be taken
...on for on job accident which author may taken into consideration. Before this memo im...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 346, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ch author may taken into consideration. Before this memo implemented analyze an argume...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 393, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: If
...t well educated then incident may occur.If company may lack due to provide trainin...
^^
Line 5, column 169, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Author
..., have less percentage of job accident. author cant take fact that experience matter i...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 176, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...less percentage of job accident. author cant take fact that experience matter in hug...
^^^^
Line 5, column 428, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Rather
...echniques that gives more productivity. rather worker of Panoply industries may work i...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 428, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: rather,
...echniques that gives more productivity. rather worker of Panoply industries may work i...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 492, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
... industries may work in very smart way. so its advantage point for panoply industr...
^^
Line 7, column 220, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reason seems to be countable; consider using: 'several reasons'.
Suggestion: several reasons
...e not reason for on job accident. There several reason such as if worker have not idea about m...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 143, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
... worker to get adequate amount of rest. this will also give same result in our manuf...
^^^^
Line 11, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... increase in productivity. To sum up with this, several thing which the autho...
^^
Line 11, column 23, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun thing seems to be countable; consider using: 'several things'.
Suggestion: several things
...productivity. To sum up with this, several thing which the author may take in to conside...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thirdly, well, such as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 19.6327345309 31% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1931.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 380.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08157894737 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52392842241 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489473684211 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.4404301051 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.4583333333 119.503703932 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8333333333 23.324526521 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95833333333 5.70786347227 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237825368324 0.218282227539 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0713645227688 0.0743258471296 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.065027742888 0.0701772020484 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112698838582 0.128457276422 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0856773822166 0.0628817314937 136% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 14.3799401198 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.3550499002 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.