To foster better work ethics and overall profits Climpson company is planning to implement electronic monitoring of employee's internet usage from their workstation. To bolster the claims the company has put forward some evidences. One of them is to employees are identifies and punished if they spent little amount of time working. Secondly, if they are using internet for personal or recreational activities strong action would be taken against them. However the argument can be considered viable if they answer the following questions and also has to go through scrupulous discussions.
Firstly, Employees Internet usage and efficiency is dependent upon various factors. If one is enthusiastic towards coding and solving problems there is no use of implementing this software. Instead of monitoring the company could motivate them by appreciating the efforts now and then when an prominent task is accomplished or during releases of a feature for an eminent hard work. For instance, the employee might be in a call all the time which this colleagues regarding some technical discussions the app that they use might consume minute amount of data and he could be punished even after being a prominent resource. If this point is considered the argument is undermined.
In addition, the company is never tracking the applications they are using and mainly concentrating on the internet usage. Suppose, an individual can easily manipulate the amount of usage by constantly opening websites which requires huge amount of data and keep refreshing it even though he is not contributing a substantial amount in work. During review process he/she would show the figures of higher internet used and would demand for a remarkable hikes. The manager would assume it to be true instead of actually giving it to a person who is worthwhile.
Lastly, the applications that an employee could use offline are not mentioned. What is the employee is coding or working in the background app which works offline ? His internet would represent a zero usage during a day in turn leading to fallacious data across the company. In other cases he might get sick during a day and could be offline. So, the individual would login during weekends to complete his/her task capriciously. These people would be attenuated and never get into the limelight.
To conclude, the argument is irrational with many unwarranted assumptions and can be considered tenable only if the company provides answers and further evidences to strengthen their argument. At this point the argument is dubious and almost falls flat with the misleading questions.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 421 350
No. of Characters: 2154 1500
No. of Different Words: 226 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.53 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.116 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.81 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 167 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 132 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 93 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.136 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.12 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.591 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.275 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.275 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.121 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 453, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ong action would be taken against them. However the argument can be considered viable i...
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Line 2, column 290, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...reciating the efforts now and then when an prominent task is accomplished or durin...
^^
Line 2, column 447, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...e might be in a call all the time which this colleagues regarding some technical dis...
^^^^
Line 2, column 622, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... even after being a prominent resource. If this point is considered the argument i...
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Line 3, column 452, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'hike'?
Suggestion: hike
... used and would demand for a remarkable hikes. The manager would assume it to be true...
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Line 5, column 13, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...er get into the limelight. To conclude, the argument is irrational with many unw...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, thus, while, as to, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2193.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 419.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2338902148 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8775806716 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 204.123752495 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536992840095 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 686.7 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.8202959391 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.6818181818 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0454545455 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45454545455 5.70786347227 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24458891364 0.218282227539 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.068925631669 0.0743258471296 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0649932478722 0.0701772020484 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132514781359 0.128457276422 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0690864347644 0.0628817314937 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 98.500998004 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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