In the preceding argument, the editor of a local Solano newspaper claims, The Solano school ought to remove its music education program.The conclusion of the argument is based on the premises. Firstly, the editor states that music programs are not popular by stating that 20 percent of high school students participated in music programs last year. Secondly, he claims that few of students college age are interested in majoring in music.Thirdly, he states that the money spent on the music program could be better to spent, in order to improve other courses. Hence, in the first glance it may seem plausible. However, careful scrutiny sheds light on the plethora of assumptions that could undermine the argument.
First of all, the argument is the Solano school has to remove its music program is not plausible, specially it depends on the editor prediction that students are not favor the music program, and citing a number to strengthen his claim makes the situation worse. Firstly, we do not know the demographic variables that has been taken in the study such as students number, ages, gender, their predilection for specific type of music, so how we can generalize the finding without knowing the basic information. The second vital point is, students might not participate in the high school program because there are not facilities, suitable teacher or even strong plan to follow it. In other words, he fails to mention the controlling variables to conclude the assumption.
Second of all, the editor states that few students interested in the music program as a major, but the truth is he undermine his position by using vague word such FEW, there is no solid ground such as statistics for generalization. In context, he fails also to give a neighboring school as a vivid example to emphasize his position, because we do not have reliable information about this school, may the school has a financial problems or different plan or needs time to burgeon their music program, and there is no relation between the rising students point average by 10 percent and omitting the program because music has a positive impact on students mood and mind and a lot of studies indicate using music as a kind of therapy. In short, without these details nothing toward bolstering the assumption.
Thirdly, the author claims, Solano school should not spend money on its music program and they have to invest in traditional courses in order to improve it, hence, he fails to mention from where he conclude the assumption, he did not aware for the student they are interested in music and the negative consequence that will face them. So, without ruling out all the possible truths about the music program, the author fails again to support the situation.
In conclusion, the author fails to justify the argument about removing the music program from Salano school in order to improve the general case of the school. To be more convincing, the author should provide more information about all the previous flaws.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 02
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 504 350
No. of Characters: 2443 1500
No. of Different Words: 224 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.738 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.847 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.504 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 182 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 132 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.837 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.875 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.357 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.569 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.161 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 137, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...t to remove its music education program.The conclusion of the argument is based on ...
^^^
Line 1, column 439, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Thirdly
...age are interested in majoring in music.Thirdly, he states that the money spent on the ...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 353, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...that has been taken in the study such as students number, ages, gender, their pre...
^^
Line 5, column 428, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'problem'?
Suggestion: problem
... school, may the school has a financial problems or different plan or needs time to burg...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 646, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
... because music has a positive impact on students mood and mind and a lot of studies indi...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 757, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'details'' or 'detail's'?
Suggestion: details'; detail's
...ind of therapy. In short, without these details nothing toward bolstering the assumptio...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 199, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'concludes'.
Suggestion: concludes
...ence, he fails to mention from where he conclude the assumption, he did not aware for th...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, as to, in conclusion, in short, kind of, such as, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 55.5748502994 121% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2513.0 2260.96107784 111% => OK
No of words: 502.0 441.139720559 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00597609562 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63317153333 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 204.123752495 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478087649402 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 771.3 705.55239521 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.8473053892 136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 110.131739294 57.8364921388 190% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.0625 119.503703932 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.375 23.324526521 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.875 5.70786347227 191% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278576823154 0.218282227539 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0974783367533 0.0743258471296 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.085775673579 0.0701772020484 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169884079422 0.128457276422 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.054756822503 0.0628817314937 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 14.3799401198 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.37 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 98.500998004 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.1389221557 129% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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