The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Parkville Daily newspaper.
"Throughout the country last year, as more and more children below the age of nine participated in youth-league sports, over 40,000 of these young players suffered injuries. When interviewed for a recent study, youth-league soccer players in several major cities also reported psychological pressure exerted by coaches and parents to win games. Furthermore, education experts say that long practice sessions for these sports take away time that could be used for academic activities. Since the disadvantages outweigh any advantages, we in Parkville should discontinue organized athletic competition for children under nine."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The writer of the letter has tried to present various negative impacts of sports on children under the age of 10 to request for ban of athletic competition for them. However, the argument is not cogent enough since it is rife with holes and assumptions.
The first point discussed it that last year around forty thousand children within the concerned age bracket were injured during the youth-league. Firstly, we are not sure of percentage of the total participants were presented by these students? also, we not sure what proportion of senior students received wounds? also, we need more details to understand how injuries and tender age of the these children are related. are children below 10 more fragile and thus more prone to falls?
The second point the writer has added is regarding the pressure exerted on the participants by parents and coaches. Anyone can come under stress regardless of the age. No detail has been added if the psychology impacted students were more commonly reported in the given age bracket. No scientific studies have been included that explicitly stated the children up to nine are more vulnerable.
Thirdly, it has been presented that the time students could spent on studies is used up in practice sessions, but no specific data has been presented to include to show how these sessions are majorly impacting children under 10. are their basics skills not being fully developed or they are not fluent is a secondary language since they have been missing classes?
All the concerns presented in the letter seem to be general. Something that can be common to many participants. To link them closely a certain age group, we will need more elaborated facts and figures. Only once these are shared any conclusive decision regarding the sports events can be taken.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 300 350
No. of Characters: 1465 1500
No. of Different Words: 168 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.162 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.883 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.503 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 107 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 56 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.077 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.495 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.538 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.328 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.61 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.074 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 246, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
...pants were presented by these students? also, we not sure what proportion of senior ...
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Line 3, column 316, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
...ion of senior students received wounds? also, we need more details to understand how...
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Line 3, column 420, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Are
... age of the these children are related. are children below 10 more fragile and thus...
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Line 7, column 40, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Thirdly, it has been presented that the time students could spent on studies is ...
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Line 7, column 62, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'spend'
Suggestion: spend
...presented that the time students could spent on studies is used up in practice sessi...
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Line 7, column 231, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Are
...re majorly impacting children under 10. are their basics skills not being fully dev...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, regarding, second, so, third, thirdly, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 16.3942115768 18% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1505.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 300.0 441.139720559 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01666666667 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57591192051 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.573333333333 0.468620217663 122% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 705.55239521 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.2875161083 57.8364921388 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5294117647 119.503703932 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6470588235 23.324526521 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.88235294118 5.70786347227 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185744358076 0.218282227539 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0594109121518 0.0743258471296 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0549160605973 0.0701772020484 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0957226976884 0.128457276422 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0646640301991 0.0628817314937 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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