In the argument, the author asserts that Adams Realty is much better than Fitch Realty, based on the numebr of agents, average revenue and the time needed to sell a house. The arguement seems quite appealing at first glance, however, upon careful scrutiny, it is full of rifes and wholes.
To begin with, the author claims Adams is definitely superior to Fitch becase it has 15 more agents and work longer. Although this may hint that Adams Realty is better, more investigation must be carried out. The number of agents is a measurement of the company, but service quality and working efficiency must take into consideration, too. It is likely that Fitch provides much better services to its customers although it has less agents compared to Adams.
Additionally, the author cites the evidence that the average home sales for Adams was 168,000 last year, much higher than Fitch at 144,000, thus reaching the conclusion that Adams is better. We know that house price is greatly affected with the location. There's possibility that Fitch focuses on rural area and city-skirts, while Adams focuses on city center to avoid competition. So it is the higher house price, rather than the number of house sold that contributed to Adams's high income. It would be much more rational to compare the number of houses sold instead of average avenue.
Last but not least, Adams is believed to sell houses in a much shorter time than Fitch. The author asserts her house was sold by Adams in only one month, while Fitch took four months ten years ago. The assumption here is that the two houses sold were of equal quality and the market was the same too. However, it is obvious that after ten years' development, the area in which the author lives have changed greatly, perhaps becoming more attractive to house buyers. What's more, if the second house was in much better condition compared to the first one, it would undoubtly be more attractive. Thus, the author's argument based on his or her own experience is non-persuasive at all. Perhaps, the author should calculate the average time needed for a house to be sold by each agent at the same period of time.
Due to the aforementioned evidences, although the author mentioned some factors that contribute to a better realty agent, the reasons are not deeply investigated or are full of assumptions. As a result, only with more vigorous and thorough analysis can we know which realty agents, Adams or Fitch, is better.
- "To reverse a decline in listener numbers, our owners have decided that WWAC must change from its current rock-music format. The decline has occurred despite population growth in our listening area, but that growth has resulted mainly from people moving h 66
- Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed. 83
- TPO-26 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.Use specific r 86
- The following appeared in a letter from a homeowner to a friend."Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom 16
- TPO-09 - Integrated Writing Task Car manufacturers and governments have been eagerly seeking a replacement for the automobile's main source of power, the internal-combustion engine. By far the most promising alternative source of energy for cars is the hy 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 429, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun agents is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...rvices to its customers although it has less agents compared to Adams. Additional...
^^^^
Line 5, column 256, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: There's
... is greatly affected with the location. Theres possibility that Fitch focuses on rural...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 466, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...coming more attractive to house buyers. Whats more, if the second house was in much b...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 603, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...undoubtly be more attractive. Thus, the authors argument based on his or her own experi...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 791, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...se to be sold by each agent at the same period of time. Due to the aforementioned evidences...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, so, thus, while, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2045.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 420.0 441.139720559 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86904761905 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50190290391 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507142857143 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 641.7 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.0385759378 57.8364921388 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 102.25 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166795172536 0.218282227539 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0580647301482 0.0743258471296 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0648025055753 0.0701772020484 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117418366143 0.128457276422 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0361684386883 0.0628817314937 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.