The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
According to the given memo, the student housing director insists to build additional new dormitories. It is supported by the increasing enrollment at Buckingham College, the increasing rent in the town, and the attractiveness of new dormitories to students. However, in order to evaluate the argument properly, several aspects have been additionally considered.
Firstly, the current trends of enrollment might not be adequate to expect the number of students in the next 50 years. There might be up and down for the number of students at the college depending on various circumstances. Probably the college accepted more students for the last five years as there were a greater number of students in these ages compared to other generations. In this case, it is hardly expectable the college will continue to increase its capacity. Therefore, expecting the student number will be doubled in 50 years might not make sense.
Secondly, the risen rent may be due to the increased number of students who chose to live off-campus rather than in the dormitories. If the housing fee for living off-campus has decreased, so it is cheaper than living in the dormitories while a similar quality is provided, more students might have preferred to live off-campus. Thus, in order to utilize the risen rent in the town to support the argument, the director will need to examine whether the increased rent is due to the increased number of students who decided to live off-campus.
Thirdly, new dormitories might not be attractive to students if the cost is unaffordably high. For many students, the housing fee is the most costly part, and they are willing to reduce it to a minimum. If new dormitories are built, the fee for them might be expensive as their facilities are all new and nice. Then, as students seriously consider housing fee, not that many students may choose the new dormitories. Hence, in this case, the argument cannot hold water.
To sum up, the assertion, as it stands now, is flawed due to its reliance on unwarranted assumptions. In order to strengthen it, the director will need to examine the three suggested aspects above. If it cannot be proved adequately, the argument will not be able to persuade others.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 371 350
No. of Characters: 1802 1500
No. of Different Words: 172 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.389 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.857 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.756 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 130 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.526 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.684 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.632 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.325 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.325 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.091 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, while, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1860.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 371.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01347708895 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86056348155 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474393530997 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.0399265388 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.8947368421 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5263157895 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21052631579 5.70786347227 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272636735881 0.218282227539 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0870849038939 0.0743258471296 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0678171236696 0.0701772020484 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14446673878 0.128457276422 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0755806841833 0.0628817314937 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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