The following prompt shows a petition by an environmental protection group to the residents of Youngtown arguing about a piece of wildlife preserved land being sold to the Smith corporation for business purposes. The argument at first glance seems to be reasonable mentioning about the diversity of bird species that lives on the land and the catastrophically effect on them. However, the petition seems to be quite unreasonable with little information about the scale of land given to the corporation. Further, there are no plausible evidence to deny their business.
In fact, the land being a center for tourist attraction will need a relaxation for the people to enjoy their rendezvous. The author failed to provide information about the revenue that could be earned through building hotels among the wildlife tourist center. Instead there is a false information about the inimical effect of the sale to the community around. If the wildlife resort is all about the inclination of the revenue for the community, then the petition holds no good for them.
Secondly, there are no proper statistics about the bird species in the small measure of land that is planned to be occupied by the Smith Corporation. How about a piece of wasteland amidst the wildlife being sold to the hotel business? There are no specific information about the occupancy of any ecological balance that will be affected. In case the land distributed for building hotels is a non fertile land, then there are no chances for any trees or bird species to be destroyed.
Despite the assurance from the corporate to protect the wildlife, the author gives a vague statements about their plans. Any initiatives that may not work for the preservation of the wildlife requires proper evidences and proofs. The petitioner just shares his own opinion about the ambiguity of the plan shared by the corporation. Nevertheless, there was no solid proof for for the failure of the plan proposed to safeguard the species. Hence, the author's argument holds no water.
To recapitulate, the petitioner is required to substantiate his stand about derogatory complaints issued on The Smith Corporation. More evidences and statistical reports are required to move on this petition against the corporation.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 367 350
No. of Characters: 1859 1500
No. of Different Words: 177 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.377 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.065 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.829 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 128 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.316 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.965 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.474 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.333 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.333 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 260, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Instead,
...tels among the wildlife tourist center. Instead there is a false information about the ...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 92, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'statement'?
Suggestion: statement
... the wildlife, the author gives a vague statements about their plans. Any initiatives that...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 372, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: for
... Nevertheless, there was no solid proof for for the failure of the plan proposed to saf...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 450, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ed to safeguard the species. Hence, the authors argument holds no water. To recapitula...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1895.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 367.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16348773842 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91320032106 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.487738419619 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 602.1 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.7361832355 57.8364921388 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.7368421053 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3157894737 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52631578947 5.70786347227 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175687665718 0.218282227539 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0585155056866 0.0743258471296 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0864572197222 0.0701772020484 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106042911112 0.128457276422 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0819334950817 0.0628817314937 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.3799401198 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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