In the given argument, the parent of a private school student has tried his best to address the problem being faced by the school children. But I still feel that the information given in the letter is nuanced. We need to have a more sharp look at the comments made and take a more lucid approach to the problem at hand. Let's just consider the claims made in the letter one by one and see if they stand warranted or are obscure at a point and need more clarity.
First, the parent states that the food being served in the cafeteria by Swift Nutrition serves low-fat and low-calorie meals. Well, a cafeteria is a place where a number of dishes are served, which specific food items or dishes is the parent referring to here is not mentioned clearly. It is possible that the food items that are not enjoyed by his son and his friends and adored by other children. Moreover, another possibility is that the meals that are healthy, as well as taste good, are still out of the radar for his child and his friends. They might ask the cafeteria in charge to help them chose the right and most sumptuous meal for them.
Also, another possibility is that since the meals being provided at the cafeteria tend to be more healthy, the child and his friends don't like the taste. Maybe they comprise of more green vegetables, fewer spices and hence lack taste. Thus, they don't find their meals enjoyable.
Another possibility is the cafeteria owner deliberately decides to provide low-fat and low-calorie meals to the students keeping in mind their study requirements. They are a Nutrition focused firm and tend to take care of calorie and fat intake of students. They know that high-fat and calorie intake will make the students sluggish and deviate them from concentrating in the classes. Thus, quantitative management of calories, fats, proteins, vitamins, and carbohydrates which are very well understood by Swift Nutrition.
Next, the parent claims that the continuing with Swift Nutrition will have detrimental effects to student's health. Per parent, students will start bringing less healthy lunches instead of eating cafeteria food. Well, if the meals provided in the cafeteria are seriously not up to the mark, the parents should focus on providing more healthy meals to school rather than spoiling their children with less healthy options.
He also claims that Swift Nutrition should be replaced immediately to prevent students from facing any further health consequences. But who guarantees that the new vendor hired will provide better meal options? and children will find those options more enjoyable? What if they do not?
Summarising, all the above nuances need careful consideration and we need to scrutinize each aspect minutely to reach the conclusion that swift nutrition should be replaced or not.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 473 350
No. of Characters: 2283 1500
No. of Different Words: 227 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.664 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.827 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.49 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 153 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.565 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.946 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.609 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.284 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.571 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.112 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 134, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...more healthy, the child and his friends dont like the taste. Maybe they comprise of ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 166, Rule ID: COMPRISE_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comprise' or 'consist of'?
Suggestion: comprise; consist of
...friends dont like the taste. Maybe they comprise of more green vegetables, fewer spices and...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 247, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...spices and hence lack taste. Thus, they dont find their meals enjoyable. Another...
^^^^
Line 11, column 212, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...hired will provide better meal options? and children will find those options more e...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, look, may, moreover, so, still, thus, well, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 11.1786427146 206% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2350.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 471.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98938428875 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5560445978 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 204.123752495 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501061571125 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 697.5 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.5650654832 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.9166666667 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.625 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.45833333333 5.70786347227 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 8.20758483034 219% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240513863306 0.218282227539 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0640039528564 0.0743258471296 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.070185281897 0.0701772020484 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103208024559 0.128457276422 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0623923656214 0.0628817314937 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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