According to parent's assumption school hired Swift Nutrition to force students to eat healthier food but there might also be the other reasons for hiring Swift. They might be paying more commission to the school with respect to older vendor, and in this case complaining about the vendor in such a way wouldn't help the students. As school's management would never take the decision of changing the vendor.
Coming to another theory by parents that student would bring less healthy lunches instead of eating cafeteria food. Since they are school kids, either they would bring food from home (More healthy) or they could also buy lunch outside the school. First option would never be a bad option as it could safely be presumed that home's food is innocuous as compared to cafeteria food. Thought in later case they are eating food which might be harmful to their body but again the limitation of pocket-money would restrain them buying food from outside daily. So they would have to eat cafeteria food on some days and slowly they would be able to develop taste for that.
Since parents has complained about the Swift to the principal and it might also be possible that he is already aware of this inevitable situation and unable to do anything. So instead of complaining to the principal of school, they could have suggested about a meeting with parents, teachers and vendor of the school and in that way they could come to a conclusion about improving tastes etc. Yet it is tough to provide taste with healthier food but not impossible. There are many products in the market with the combination of both.
On the other hand parents are coming to a conclusion taking points into account of some kids. Since parents database is so small they could not blame school food's taste. It might be possible that only his son and his friends are not liking the food except everyone does.
Our body though take time to accept the changes happening but it would always do that. In same case students would become habitual of taking this food with time.
In last parents conclusion about serious health consequences are full of many assumption which are not true in many senses as stated above.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 303, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...plaining about the vendor in such a way wouldnt help the students. As schools managemen...
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Line 1, column 330, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...n such a way wouldnt help the students. As schools management would never take the...
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Line 7, column 95, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...aking points into account of some kids. Since parents database is so small they could...
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Line 7, column 226, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...sible that only his son and his friends are not liking the food except everyone does. Our b...
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Line 11, column 9, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parents'' or 'parent's'?
Suggestion: parents'; parent's
... taking this food with time. In last parents conclusion about serious health consequ...
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Line 11, column 74, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun assumption seems to be countable; consider using: 'many assumptions'.
Suggestion: many assumptions
...serious health consequences are full of many assumption which are not true in many senses as st...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'so', 'with respect to', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.2475 0.25644967241 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.16 0.15541462614 103% => OK
Adjectives: 0.09 0.0836205057962 108% => OK
Adverbs: 0.045 0.0520304965353 86% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0525 0.0272364105082 193% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.13 0.125424944231 104% => OK
Participles: 0.055 0.0416121511921 132% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.29741304861 2.79052419416 82% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0425 0.026700313972 159% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.08 0.113004496875 71% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0475 0.0255425247493 186% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.0075 0.0127820249294 59% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2187.0 2731.13054187 80% => OK
No of words: 378.0 446.07635468 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.78571428571 6.12365571057 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.57801047555 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.314814814815 0.378187486979 83% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.21164021164 0.287650121315 74% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.124338624339 0.208842608468 60% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0846560846561 0.135150697306 63% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29741304861 2.79052419416 82% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 207.018472906 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489417989418 0.469332199767 104% => OK
Word variations: 52.2059551164 52.1807786196 100% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.039408867 90% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.2022227129 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9803644516 57.7814097925 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.5 141.986410481 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 23.2022227129 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.388888888889 0.724660767414 54% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 3.58251231527 167% => OK
Readability: 42.164021164 51.9672348444 81% => OK
Elegance: 1.67961165049 1.8405768891 91% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335907488783 0.441005458295 76% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.110749699959 0.135418324435 82% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0621587556859 0.0829849096947 75% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.584608142546 0.58762219726 99% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.153941764203 0.147661913831 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137243774537 0.193483328276 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0752434072479 0.0970749176394 78% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.235082847953 0.42659136922 55% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.130634432103 0.0774707102158 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19808183947 0.312017818177 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107635574725 0.0698173142475 154% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.33743842365 120% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.87684729064 58% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.82512315271 83% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 6.46551724138 139% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 5.36822660099 75% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.82389162562 142% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 14.657635468 116% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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