An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The given argument states that the government of Tagus should do their utmost to advertise and promote a newly breed of millet, engineered by an international organization which is supposedly high in vitamin A and might be the answer to the vitamin A deficiency faced by the people of Tagus. But before moving forward with this recommendation, few important questions need to be answered to ascertain its benefits.
Firstly, more who is this international development organization? Where does it originate from? What are its credentials? Since the new millet crop will be widely consumed by the citizens of Tagus, deciphering the legitimacy of the institution engineering it is of pivotal importance. It maybe possible that this organization is just a money making company which for its own gains, is taking advantage of the impoverishment and plight of the people of Tagus.
Secondly, the recommendation is based on a primary assumption that the millet variant which is high in vitamin A will be sufficient to cater to the deficiency faced by the nation of Tagus. It might be possible that even though the company is portraying the new variety as one with high vitamin, it might just be a small increment on the existing vitamin quantities in the existing millet consumed. Hence a detailed nutritional study of the new variety that is being proposed is necessary before any further movements have to be made for its acceptance.
Furthermore, it is mentioned that new variety of millet bares a higher cost to the already impoverished farmer. As a respite, it is stated that the farmers will be paid subsidies. But, there is no detail regarding the percentage/amount of subsidy to be given. It is very likely that even after providing this subsidy, the final cost of production of the new millet variant is still too massive for the poor farmer to bear. Moreover there is no mention of the type of subsidy, whether it is going to be in cash equivalents or supplementary farming equipment or any other form. Hence, there are a lot of unanswered questions of the nature and quantum of the subsidy to be provided, which should be answered to estimate the result of the proposal.
Lastly, there is an assumption made that as millet is a staple in the diet of the people of Tagus, the new variant will be accepted without any hesitation. Since millet is consumed everyday, there might be few people who are accustomed to the existing crop and might not want to switch. This maybe due to various factors such as a difference in taste, texture, and cost. Hence, an important question needs to be answered that will the majority of the population in Tagus, readily and happily adopt and consume the new millet variant without any push back.
Therefore in conclusion, the above questions enlighten the gaping holes in the given recommendation and should be answered to ascertain its viability before any further advancements are to be made.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 496 350
No. of Characters: 2387 1500
No. of Different Words: 215 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.719 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.812 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.834 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 171 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 129 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 88 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.619 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.965 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.619 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.3 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.488 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.048 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 104, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('newly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('breed') instead of another adjective.
...o their utmost to advertise and promote a newly breed of millet, engineered by an internation...
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Line 1, column 344, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...moving forward with this recommendation, few important questions need to be answe...
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Line 3, column 153, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...dentials? Since the new millet crop will be widely consumed by the citizens of Ta...
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Line 4, column 241, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...possible that even though the company is portraying the new variety as one with h...
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Line 4, column 399, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...tities in the existing millet consumed. Hence a detailed nutritional study of the new...
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Line 6, column 424, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...oo massive for the poor farmer to bear. Moreover there is no mention of the type of subs...
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Line 8, column 182, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ny hesitation. Since millet is consumed everyday, there might be few people who are accu...
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Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...illet variant without any push back. Therefore in conclusion, the above questions enli...
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Line 10, column 150, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d be answered to ascertain its viability before any further advancements are to b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, lastly, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, still, therefore, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 42.0 19.6327345309 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 55.5748502994 128% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2449.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 495.0 441.139720559 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94747474747 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95217395976 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450505050505 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 795.6 705.55239521 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.9706046672 57.8364921388 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.619047619 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5714285714 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52380952381 5.70786347227 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.451822363131 0.218282227539 207% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127516431913 0.0743258471296 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0897480316651 0.0701772020484 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22727234426 0.128457276422 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0875571878356 0.0628817314937 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 98.500998004 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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