Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have

The passage claims that Pirouettes Ballet School is the best choice because it has the most rigorous program with teachers who have been in prestigious competitions. It further claims the many of its students have become top professional dancers. But this passage is missing some critical information without which it is difficult to evaluate the recommendation.

The passage claims that it has the more intensive program in Elmtown. Having the most intensive program does not make it the best. It could be that the children are made to work hard on movements which are not essential to ballet.

The passage further claims that it has teachers who have danced in prestigious ballet companies all over the world but fail to mention how many teachers. For all we know, it could be two. It is also not mentioned if these teachers will be teaching the children or will they be off to another prestigious ballet company. It could be the case that these teachers are just for show and do not teach anything to the children.

Even if the teachers who teach the students have danced in the most prestigious companies all over the world, it does not mean the students are going to be really good. It might be the case that even though the instructors are really good dancers, they might be very bad at teaching. The passage mentions that many students have become professional dancers at top companies, but again fails to say how many students. It could be two, it could be hundred etc. This will indicate if the Ballet School is any good.

The passage has many flaws which need to be rectified before we can evaluate the recommendation.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 447, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a hundred'.
Suggestion: a hundred
... students. It could be two, it could be hundred etc. This will indicate if the Ballet S...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, really, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 55.5748502994 41% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1358.0 2260.96107784 60% => OK
No of words: 283.0 441.139720559 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79858657244 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5980215436 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 204.123752495 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.452296819788 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 403.2 705.55239521 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.3158092472 57.8364921388 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.875 119.503703932 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6875 23.324526521 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.5625 5.70786347227 27% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.342679917223 0.218282227539 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120639074139 0.0743258471296 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112380316767 0.0701772020484 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183793778224 0.128457276422 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0831556731085 0.0628817314937 132% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 14.3799401198 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 48.3550499002 147% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.197005988 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 12.5979740519 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.82 8.32208582834 82% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 98.500998004 43% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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