Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have

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Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.

Passage concludes or proposes pirouettes ballet school is the clear choice for any child.In order to support this conclusion author has come up with certain evidences.However on a deeper scrutiny it is revealed that none of the evidence land credible support to the conclusion.Let us scrutinize them further

Firstly,author said of all the dance schools in Elmtown,pirouettes has the most intensive program,and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world but author must have mistakenly assumed that only having eminent teachers makes the pirouettes ballet school the clear choice for dance school rather their must be proper substantial evidences regarding the number of children admitted in it,what are their feedback are they teaching out dated or antiquated dance with respect to the present contemporary dance.

Secondly,author asserted that many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies but missed a critical fact that many students doesn't mean that they are all have gone to become professional dancers with top dance companies must clear his ambiguous tone by giving some clear solutions to the problem that author should provide number of students that have gone on to become professional dancers with acme dance companies.

After having seen the above discussion,we come to know that the proposal has not been substantiated by the evidences provided by the author.The evidences hold inherent weakness.Thus,the author must bring more data into consideration to make such conclusion.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus, with respect to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.6327345309 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 16.3942115768 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1358.0 2260.96107784 60% => OK
No of words: 243.0 441.139720559 55% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58847736626 5.12650576532 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94822203886 4.56307096286 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11416881116 2.78398813304 112% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 204.123752495 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.572016460905 0.468620217663 122% => OK
syllable_count: 409.5 705.55239521 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 3.0 19.7664670659 15% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 81.0 22.8473053892 355% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 251.938264043 57.8364921388 436% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 452.666666667 119.503703932 379% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 81.0 23.324526521 347% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 28.0 5.70786347227 491% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.473020639142 0.218282227539 217% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.262281396433 0.0743258471296 353% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.216220057589 0.0701772020484 308% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24155782162 0.128457276422 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.204711592809 0.0628817314937 326% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 45.4 14.3799401198 316% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -19.2 48.3550499002 -40% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.1628742515 222% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 36.1 12.197005988 296% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 16.33 12.5979740519 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.68 8.32208582834 140% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 98.500998004 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 55.0 12.3882235529 444% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 34.4 11.1389221557 309% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 16.0 11.9071856287 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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