Recent incursions by deep-sea fisherman into the habitat of the Madagascan shrimp have led to a significant reduction in the species population. With the breeding season fast approaching, the number of shrimp should soon begin to increase. Nonetheless, the population should not return to the levels before the fishing boats arrived. Because this trend is expected to continue over the next several years, the Madagascan shrimp will quickly become an endangered species.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author argues that Madagascar shrimp would become an endangered species if the incursion of deep-sea fisherman continues. though the claim seems to be credible claim but, it has quite a few loopholes in it and author have made few unwarranted assumption which makes his argument weak. this essay would elaborate those loopholes and its effect on the strength of the argument.
The author makes a blunt connection that as the deep-sea fisherman incursion inchoated the levels of shrimp population began to decrease. this need further evaluation. there are several factors in the sea that affect the life of any aquatic creature, like there might be some agglomeration of junk due to myriad of companies dumping off their waste in deep-sea and consumption of which could have led to the ebb of shrimps. The claim doesn't even considers other factors and bluntly establishes a relation that fisherman led to the curtailment.
The contention assumes that with the breeding season approaching the shrimps should have been increasing fastly. this is an unwarrented assumption. There might be a situation where mating is difficult or due to some environmental factors the time to breed might get delayed and hence, the shrimp might not increase at all at the author's expected time.
Also, there is no evidence about the author's argument that the trend of mating at this period shall continue for years and also that the shrimps shall not return to the previous level of population after incursion of fisherman. There can be several reasons of the change of mating season like, volcanic eruption or underwater earthquake which can hinder the breeding of shrimps and hence, we can say that this assumptions is totally unwarranted.
After proper analysis of points, we can conclude that though the author's claim seems to be legitimate but, due to some loopholes and suppositions and lack of evidence, it weakens the contention and makes compels us to reject the contention.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 323 350
No. of Characters: 1622 1500
No. of Different Words: 166 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.239 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.022 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.687 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 117 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 40.375 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.911 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.427 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.779 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.12 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Though
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Suggestion: This
...of shrimp population began to decrease. this need further evaluation. there are seve...
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Suggestion: There
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Suggestion: doesn't
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...mps should have been increasing fastly. this is an unwarrented assumption. There mig...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
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Suggestion: these
...g of shrimps and hence, we can say that this assumptions is totally unwarranted. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1657.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 322.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14596273292 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73464972035 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531055900621 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 705.55239521 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.0 57.8364921388 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.461538462 119.503703932 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7692307692 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.84615384615 5.70786347227 32% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195758093026 0.218282227539 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0753800831597 0.0743258471296 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0786531158946 0.0701772020484 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103108997777 0.128457276422 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0561896736467 0.0628817314937 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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