Recent incursions by deep-sea fishermen into the habitat of the Madagascan shrimp have led to a significant reduction in the species population. With the breeding season fast approaching, the number of shrimp should soon begin to increase. Nonetheless, the population should not return to the levels before the fishing boats arrived. Because this trend is expected to continue over the next several years, the Madagascan shrimp will quickly become an endangered species.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument states that the Madagascan shrimp is soon to become an endangered species due to the incursions by deep-sea fishermen. The conclusion reached by the argument rests on the fact that rate of bredding of the Madagascan shrimps is far lesser than the rate of death induced by the deep-sea fishermen. In order to truly evaluate the validity of the argument, the following evidences need to be provided.
Firstly, the argument needs to elaborate upon the reason for the significant reduction in shrimp population. The argument prematurely assumes that deep-sea fishermen are the sole cause for the reduction in population. It is possible that the shrimps major food source has died out due to pollution of the water body. In such a case many shrimp will die of starvation. Further its possible that there has been a recent oil spill near the Madagascar coast which released harmful toxins into the sea. The shrimps might have very well died from these toxins. If any of the above are true, then the argument's assumption that deep-sea fishermen are the reason for the death of shrimps is not valid.
Secondly, the argument needs to clarify on what basis it assumes that the trend (shrimp population reduction) will continue over the next few years. It might well be possible that due to the recent reduction in shrimp population widlife conservationists have successfully convinced the Madagascar goverment to release a bill which makes it illegal for deep-sea fisherman to venture into regions of water bodies where these shrimp reside. In such a scenario the number of fishermen entering and fishing for shrimp will significantly reduce, and thus leading to the overall increase in the shrimp population.
Further, the argument maintains that the rate of death of the Madagascan shrimp is way greater than the rate of breeding. The argument needs to clarify on what basis it makes such a statement. It might be the case that this variety of shrimp have a very high multiplying factor, with each individual having multiple partners to breed with. If the above is true, the rate of breeding will be exponential. In such a case the exponential breeding rate will far outrank the linear death rate of the shrimp (death rate of shrimp is directly proportional to number of incursions, making it linear), and thus lead to the increase in population of the shrimp regardless of the incursions by deep-sea fishermen.
In conclusion, the argument as it stands is severely flawed due to its dependance on several unwarranted assumptions. The above mentioned evidences need to be provided to fully evaluate the validity of the argument.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 437 350
No. of Characters: 2159 1500
No. of Different Words: 179 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.572 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.941 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.705 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 157 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 122 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 95 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.85 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.061 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.45 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.353 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.545 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.078 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 595, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'arguments'' or 'argument's'?
Suggestion: arguments'; argument's
... If any of the above are true, then the arguments assumption that deep-sea fishermen are ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 16.3942115768 159% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2205.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 437.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04576659039 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77779829296 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.432494279176 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 682.2 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.5524193088 57.8364921388 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.25 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.85 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.65 5.70786347227 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.88822355289 203% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336124596968 0.218282227539 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107794590601 0.0743258471296 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0806665202822 0.0701772020484 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191887272878 0.128457276422 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0984931126895 0.0628817314937 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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