The argument posits that salicylates are salutary and can reduce headaches. An added advantage would be that they can be added as flavor additives for food. The study mentioned in the argument seems convincing at the first glance but a deeper scrutiny sheds light on a plethora of possible flaws which could test the validity of the argument.
Firstly, the argument states one of the possible therapeutic effects of salicylates and is considered tantamount to aspirin which is a medicine used to treat headaches. It is also mentioned that many foods are naturally rich in salicylates but food processing companies add salicylates to foods as preservatives. Is the amount which is naturally present in food not sufficient to act as a cure for headache? If the argument had mentioned what is the quantity of salicylate required in milligrams to be an effective cure-all for medicine, this evidence would strengthen the argument. Also, does lack of preservatives lead to headaches? If this is the case, any other preservative could be added instead of salicylate.
Secondly, the argument misses out on mentioning what is the healthy intake of salicylate in a human body. For instance, what can be the maximum amount of salicylate which can be consumed. Additionally, does the addition of salicylate have any negative side effects? What if the salicylate alleviates the headache but gives rise to different medical problems? Answering these questions will enable us to evaluate the recommendation effectively.
Thirdly, the study has been conducted on the residents of Mentia. The study has been done on a small sample size, which represents the generalization of the whole population. In addition to this, the study's reports findings state that there is a correlation between the rise in the commercial use of salicylates and the steady decline in the average number of headaches. There are a myriad reasons which could explain the reason for the decline in the number of headaches over twenty years. There could have been a substantial lifestyle change adopted by the residents or they might have resorted to meditation as a treatment for headaches. To consolidate the findings of the study mentioned in the argument, the argument must mention that the correlation between decline in headaches and the increase in salicylates is not a mere coincidence and it is the only possible cause behind the effect.
Thus, the argument has a few flaws and providing a few more evidences like the ones mentioned above will give a clearer picture if salicylates are the reason behind the cure or the findings of the study are bogus.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
the argument 1 and argument 2 are relatively duplicated. Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:
Based on these study results, some health experts predict that residents of Mentia will suffer even fewer headaches in the future.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 429 350
No. of Characters: 2153 1500
No. of Different Words: 203 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.551 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.019 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.898 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 153 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 129 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 105 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 67 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.429 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.444 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.305 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.518 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.1 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, thus, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2201.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 429.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13053613054 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97161019048 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475524475524 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 729.0 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.4318000959 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.80952381 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4285714286 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04761904762 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19323771473 0.218282227539 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0639776006008 0.0743258471296 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0634396932388 0.0701772020484 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103193682726 0.128457276422 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0541247620151 0.0628817314937 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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