In the above argument, the writer premise that the Adams Realty(AR) is superior than Fitch Reality(FR). Conspicuously, the above statement seems plausible yet fallacious at the same time. To bolster the argument, the writer must have cited relevant evidences so that every readers would be convinced.
First and foremost, the writer is talking about the superiority of the AR over FR. The writer cites that AR has 40 real estate agents where as FR has 25,of whom many work part time. Just on these evidence, the writer concludes about their superiority.These evidence aren`t enough to the conclude the decision. The evaluation shlould`t be based on the quantity, they must look after the quality they serve to the customers. If the comparision were valid on the basis of the quality matters then it would bolster the conclusion.
Secondly, their last year`s revenue was compared and the revenue of AR was more than that of FR. The revenue contributed by each of the agents of both the estate should have been showed so the the real comparison can be made and the conclusion shloud have been made on that basis .But here, no such statistical data are presented to undergrid the writer`s conclusion. The two estate might hvae different years of experience. May be AR was established many years ago than FR and by that time AR might have gained a lot of experience and the number of customers were more in that estate. In such case how can there be comparision between such already established estate and the newly inexperienced estate.There are no such evidence cited in the argument.
Thirldy, the writer is comparing the ten years ago case with the last years case. How can such a comparision be made? Ten years ago,the case might be that the writer`s house wasn`t liked by many of the buyer`s because of its own defects that took 4 months to sell. And, there might have been some technical problems in the estate that took them 4 months to settle it down. The writer should have mentioned clearly about these facts. And the last years house that writer listed in AR, That house might have been refurbished and the house might have been liked by the customers so it just took one months.this might also be the case.
So, in sum, the conclusion made by the writer doesn`t seem to be bolstered from the evidence that he provided. With such insignificant evidence, his conclusions can be easily undermined. So, further facts and evidence would be prefered to bolster the conclusion.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 430 350
No. of Characters: 1996 1500
No. of Different Words: 191 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.554 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.642 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.46 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 117 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.545 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.552 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.455 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.308 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.529 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.104 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 79, Rule ID: SUPERIOR_THAN[1]
Message: The adjective superior is normally used with 'to'.
Suggestion: to
...ise that the Adams RealtyAR is superior than Fitch RealityFR. Conspicuously, the abo...
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Line 3, column 135, Rule ID: WHERE_AS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whereas'?
Suggestion: whereas
...cites that AR has 40 real estate agents where as FR has 25,of whom many work part time. ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 172, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...ts where as FR has 25,of whom many work part time. Just on these evidence, the writer con...
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Line 3, column 252, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: These
...riter concludes about their superiority.These evidence aren't enough to the conc...
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Line 3, column 289, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ty.These evidence aren't enough to the conclude the decision. The evaluation shlould&ap...
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Line 3, column 434, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...he quality they serve to the customers. If the comparision were valid on the basis...
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Line 5, column 148, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...evenue contributed by each of the agents of both the estate should have been show...
^^
Line 5, column 196, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...h the estate should have been showed so the the real comparison can be made and the con...
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Line 5, column 196, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...h the estate should have been showed so the the real comparison can be made and the con...
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Line 5, column 286, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...sion shloud have been made on that basis .But here, no such statistical data are p...
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Line 5, column 288, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...on shloud have been made on that basis .But here, no such statistical data are pres...
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Line 5, column 502, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... many years ago than FR and by that time AR might have gained a lot of experience...
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Line 5, column 716, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: There
...tate and the newly inexperienced estate.There are no such evidence cited in the argum...
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Line 7, column 33, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ent. Thirldy, the writer is comparing the ten years ago case with the last yea...
^^
Line 7, column 77, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e ten years ago case with the last years case. How can such a comparision be made...
^^
Line 7, column 134, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...uch a comparision be made? Ten years ago,the case might be that the writer's ho...
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Line 7, column 544, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...at house might have been refurbished and the house might have been liked by the c...
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Line 7, column 611, Rule ID: ONE_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one month', 'a month', or simply 'months'?
Suggestion: one month; a month; months
... liked by the customers so it just took one months.this might also be the case. So, in ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2102.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 426.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93427230047 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79144206891 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.462441314554 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 652.5 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.3794365367 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5454545455 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3636363636 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.36363636364 5.70786347227 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.25449101796 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168747878686 0.218282227539 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.054363009617 0.0743258471296 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616269137647 0.0701772020484 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0913800800974 0.128457276422 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0434933764463 0.0628817314937 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.3799401198 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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