Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument that the discovery of the woven basket in the ancient village of Lithos will substantially prove that baskets are not uniquely Palean may seem logical at first glance. However, the author relies on unsupported assumptions about what kind of evidence archaeologists based their reasoning on. Therefore, the argument is fundamentally flawed and unconvincing.
The writer assumes that the origin of woven baskets is the village of Palea because simply it was the place where archeologists discovered it first. In fact, the timeline of discovery might be entirely irrelevant to the origin. Suppose, for example, the archeologists have first discovered the baskets in the village of Lithos, it would turn the argument upside down. Furthermore, the author assumes the Brim River that separates the two villages have not been subject to change with time. The author characterizes the river as deep and broad that would be crossed only by boat. If the river has undergone drastic geological changes, and, at certain periods, it was shallow and narrow, it would definitely not be necessary to cross it with a boat. It might be that Paleans used their unique baskets to carry goods to trade with the people of Lithos village across the river, which may explain the unique origin.
Additionally, the writer assumes that the absence of Palean boats is definitive evidence that Paleans could not cross the river. In fact, perhaps the material of boats that time has degenerated and could not leave traces of evidence today, or even the evidence related to boats are not discovered yet. Suppose, if there were actually boats, it would explain that Paleans have used them to cross the river carrying out the unique baskets. In its current form, the argument fails to establish a link that demonstrates that baskets are not unique to Paleans because of the presence of baskets on the other side of the bank. If the baskets were carried from one side to another just by the stream of the river, or in a season of a flood, their presence does not mandate that they are not unique to the village of Palea.
The notion that the baskets are not unique to Paleans would be strengthened by evidence that the river has not undergone any geological changes that may or may not affect the stream. Also, making sure that other means to cross the river could not be a way for transportation such as swimming, walking, or through a bridge. The author should also demonstrate that the material of the boats used during that period of time could not degenerate.
In conclusion, the writer is not necessarily mistaken in stating that the presence of the baskets on the other side of the river indicates that the baskets are not uniquely Palean. After all, the argument of the river separation and absence of boats to reach the other side would probably lay the foundation to initiate a good argument. However, to support the assertion that baskets are not unique to the village of Palea. The writer must first provide meticulous details of each aspect of the evidence that will, in fact, show unequivocally the presence of baskets in Lithos is not due to the reach of Paleans to the other side. Without such evidence, archaeologists should be skeptical that baskets are not uniquely Palean.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 554 350
No. of Characters: 2662 1500
No. of Different Words: 211 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.852 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.805 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.561 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 187 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 138 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.087 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.983 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.826 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.339 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.52 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 407, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... material of the boats used during that period of time could not degenerate. In conclusio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, after all, for example, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 26.0 13.6137724551 191% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 55.5748502994 140% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2741.0 2260.96107784 121% => OK
No of words: 554.0 441.139720559 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9476534296 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85151570047 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61912548795 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 204.123752495 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.404332129964 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 868.5 705.55239521 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.76447105788 171% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.0149503602 57.8364921388 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.173913043 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0869565217 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04347826087 5.70786347227 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158607991689 0.218282227539 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0553874352699 0.0743258471296 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046664103487 0.0701772020484 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0934849936717 0.128457276422 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0405888867139 0.0628817314937 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 98.500998004 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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