The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition

Preparing young people for leadership and related positions is always important. İn almost every field, leaders are necessary. Author states that, the best way to prepare future leaders is promoting cooperation rather than competition. I moderately disagree with this position for two reasons but i do concede that cooperation is also important.
Firstly, is cooperation important for all fields ? For example, maybe government fields demand cooperation skills more than competition abilities, because there is no need for competition. But according to research conducted in 2015, in industry and other fields competition is very high. Thus, one who can not compete is no longer survive not only in leadership but also in any other position.
In addition, diminishing competition can have bad effects. According to researchs, competition increase development in high extends. In addition, researches show that it increases perception and fast thinking. It also make people more engaged in subject. It faciliate learning process and make it entertaining. For these reasons, we can not overlook the signifiance of competition.
Nevertheless, i admit that cooperation skills are important for leaders. Because, main job of leaders is communicatibg and promoting collaboration in workplaces. If they have not enough cooperation sense, effectivity of work can significantly decrease.
So it could be concluded that competition is as necessary as cooperation and the youth should be malleable to any situation they encounter.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, thus, for example, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 58.6224719101 29% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 25.0 12.9106741573 194% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1299.0 2235.4752809 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 227.0 442.535393258 51% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.72246696035 5.05705443957 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88156143495 4.55969084622 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25227800932 2.79657885939 116% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 215.323595506 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.616740088106 0.4932671777 125% => OK
syllable_count: 404.1 704.065955056 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 23.0359550562 52% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.89027221 60.3974514979 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 72.1666666667 118.986275619 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.6111111111 23.4991977007 54% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.21951772744 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360721996466 0.243740707755 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0968104204212 0.0831039109588 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0851032221669 0.0758088955206 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16815324935 0.150359130593 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110333357185 0.0667264976115 165% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 42.38 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.01 12.1639044944 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 100.480337079 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 11.2143820225 61% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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