Leaders around the world face monumentus decisions every day, so it is imperitive that those leaders are excellently prepared. As such, young citizens must be properly prepared to face the wide array of challenges that leaders are expected to solve. However, no one person will have the necessary knowledge and expertice required for each diverse issue; therefore, these future leaders must be taught how to work as a team to succeed. Because leaders of countries must work together to achieve global solutions, rulers are not the expert for every issue, and overly competitive despots can be stubborn, young people should be instilled with a sense of cooperation instead of competition.
In our world today, leaders around the world must work together to find and execute solutions to global problems. With the advances in technology, countries can no longer remain isolated from one another. Instead, nations are increasingly being forced to come together to solve a multitude of issues. For example, elected officials around the world regularly meet to discuss plans to halt and reverse global warming. This complex issue requires cooperation among every nation around the world in order to enforce a change. Leaders must be willing to work together in order to find a solution that works for countries rich and poor. As such, a sense of cooperation is required for these leaders to succeed; therefore, future rulers should be taught how to effectively cooperate because their profession will require it.
Additionally, rulers are not the expert for every issue that their nation faces. While leaders might be experienced in a few different fields, they face issues that are very interdisciplinary by nature. An example would be energy production because it requires an understanding of economics for the effects of price changes, an understanding of engineering for the current abilities of the renewable and oil energy sources, and an understanding of effective legislation for the safety of the public. Due to its very diverse nature, energy production cannot be understood by just one person; only a team of economists, engineers, and legislators could collectively understand the minute details. That group would then require cooperation to ensure that they worked together efficiently towards their goal instead of opposing each other's work. These sort of a team could be seen as the cabinet that the President of the United States regularly conferences with before making a decision.Therefore, a leader would need to have the skills required to work as part of a team similar to what was mentioned in order to steer the nation towards prosperity.
On the other hand, critics could argue that competition would result in leaders that are more effective individually and who could single-handedly make crucial decisions. According to them, competition would result in future leaders who have well-honed leadership and problem-solving skills. These individuals would be able to listen to the advice of others, but ultimately, they would make the necessary decision. While those individuals would seem like idea leaders, those very people who emerged from competition could have very nefarious characteristics instead. For example, those young people could have succeeded in those competitions by cheating or blackmailing their opponents. Because they are incentivized to win, some people would be likely to do anything even immoral actions to win. Those would not be characteristics of an effective leader, so forcing future leaders to compete would be ineffective.
In conclusion, society should prepare its young people to lead by enabling them to develop a strong ability to efficiently cooperate with others like they would do as a leader. While competition could result in a strong individual, the complex problems of the world require leaders and their teams to work collectively instead of individually.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 843, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this sort' or 'These nulls'?
Suggestion: This sort; These nulls
...l instead of opposing each others work. These sort of a team could be seen as the cabinet ...
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Line 5, column 849, Rule ID: KIND_OF_A[1]
Message: Don't include 'a' after a classification term. Use simply 'sort of'.
Suggestion: sort of
...ead of opposing each others work. These sort of a team could be seen as the cabinet that ...
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Line 5, column 985, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Therefore
...nferences with before making a decision.Therefore, a leader would need to have the skills...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, still, then, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, sort of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 34.0 12.4196629213 274% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 89.0 58.6224719101 152% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3314.0 2235.4752809 148% => OK
No of words: 616.0 442.535393258 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37987012987 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.98190197535 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98612882171 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 284.0 215.323595506 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.461038961039 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1054.8 704.065955056 150% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.8461027005 60.3974514979 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.461538462 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6923076923 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.34615384615 5.21951772744 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0954294219081 0.243740707755 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0323887128789 0.0831039109588 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0371811631571 0.0758088955206 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0672642296145 0.150359130593 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0179581242795 0.0667264976115 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.1639044944 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 151.0 100.480337079 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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