Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which

In our everyday life, we often come across the word "Dream" and we often hear people saying "I am chasing my dream". A dream is something that can set an insipid mind to unrest, a sensation that can energize a personality and inculcate a zeal to achieve something worthwhile. Dreams are meant to be followed and not just dreamt off. They help us climb those ladders in life which once occur as a hefty task. They instill the determination and courage to achieve the impossible. When young people are advised to follow their dreams, it is absolutely justified. Since the realization of dreams- big or small helps in the overall upliftment of a person's confidence and instills a sense of achievement.

It is not obscure to say that dreams are the sole reasons for such an evolved world. For instance, people like Martin Luther King and Mother Teresa dreamt of a peaceful world and made significant efforts that are totally cogent in their dream. Pranav Mistry dreamt of a technically advanced World and hence sixth sense technology came into the picture. The latest advancements in Science and Technology are one way or the other, a result of those prodigious dreams these technocrats ever dreamt off. Hence, dreams are definitely the best pursuit to bring change, not only in personal lives but also in the lives of the people around us. And who knows you little dream may one day be recognized by the entire World and is no longer confined to your little sub-conscious brain.

When we talk about goals, they are simply actions that lead to substantial success not only for an individual but an entire society or race. They have nothing to do with one's dreams and solely result-oriented. Goals are meant to be achieved with a very focused mind, keeping aside your dreams. One is liable for his/her goals but not his dreams. Achievement of Goals may give you success and fame but fulfilling your dreams gives you satisfaction.

Blatantly, the claim here is rational to an extent but dreams definitely have an upper hand as compared to goals. Dreams are the driving force behind satisfied success. Goals may exhaust but dreams never do. They originate in a person's mind, flourish there and enhances it to take steps for their fulfillment. No other forces can govern dreams.

The reason given for the claim here demonstrates that many people's dreams are inherently selfish. This is true to an extent but not wholly. People's dreams are restricted to their thought process, upbringing and their perception about life. They are not completely selfish. There is a strong possibility of their intersection with other people's dreams and ambitions and moreover, we can't simply conclude that a person's dreams are not going to benefit the entire human race. If that's for the goodwill of one, it's definitely for the goodwill of many others, if not all. Hence, dreams are meant to be chased and realized and there is no force on this Earth that should govern or put severe restrictions to achieve what one dreams of.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 664, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...ll helps in the overall upliftment of a persons confidence and instills a sense of achi...
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Line 3, column 616, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
...personal lives but also in the lives of the people around us. And who knows you little dream may one...
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Line 5, column 171, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...y or race. They have nothing to do with ones dreams and solely result-oriented. Goal...
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Line 9, column 383, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...s dreams and ambitions and moreover, we cant simply conclude that a persons dreams a...
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Line 9, column 477, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...ng to benefit the entire human race. If thats for the goodwill of one, its definitely...
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Line 9, column 508, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...race. If thats for the goodwill of one, its definitely for the goodwill of many oth...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, moreover, so, still, while, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 14.8657303371 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2520.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 514.0 442.535393258 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90272373541 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66608811925 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 215.323595506 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519455252918 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 775.8 704.065955056 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.2370786517 148% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.2755512193 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.0 118.986275619 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1333333333 23.4991977007 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.23333333333 5.21951772744 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 25.0 10.2758426966 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243832493074 0.243740707755 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0601879423447 0.0831039109588 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0619814470816 0.0758088955206 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13390063841 0.150359130593 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0645789826385 0.0667264976115 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 14.1392134831 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 100.480337079 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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