When it comes to evaluate the value of the work, as my concern we should not narrow the eyesights in some given fields once we see the issue. People always recognize the limits of their sights are the limit of the world as Shopenhauer said.,So the judgement of work from experts who could be critical in thingking are important while not all of them are valuable in any given fields. Sometimes we need guidance of the experts while they are not significant all the time in all fields. I should say there are one thousand Harmlets in one thousand audiences' minds so we should specify thr issue into given condtiions, in general, as common people we should have the judgement of ourselves as the world of our own is not in the hand of some one while we all live in this Planet. So I will adress my views as below.
To begin with, we need to listen to the experts' judgements as they are professional and of course, critical. Especially in the science field. I am majoring in Mechanical Engineering which need accuracy when we design some gears of machines. Once as I was in the course of desiging machines, we draw our designs on papers, while we I handed in my tutor , she immediately found there are some minor flaws which could not be noticed by other students or teahcers that there were some places which being required symertrical while I hadn't noticed. After that I realized the importance of following the guidance of the experts. In science field, we should take more advice from the experts who could offer us critical judgement.
While on the other hand, the experts are not allways right as they can not be critical enough. Once we we looked at the stars, our ancsetors would contend that the stars all orbited around us even there was a critical theory named Geocentric Theory. We could not argue that they were not profesional or critical as they are limited by the equipments and the governing of the religion. Later, there was still some brave people like Copernicus assumed the Heliocentric Theory which was proved.So we should not draw the conclusion so arbitrary as there still some mystery in world we are living,let alone the universe. I got shocked when I knew the sum of all natural integers is -1/12 which was proved by four mathiscists while I still very confused about the result. Maybe the four experts are the pioneers who break the rule of math today.
Finally, whether the critical judgement of workfrom experts valuable depends on the fields. As we discussed the science, the Arts is another different area for the experts. People today would like to listen to some western classical music or symphony.While when I asked my grandfather who taught Peking Opera in the university, he strongly advised my to listen to more opera even aborad.When I looked at some famous paint which
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, look, may, so, still, while, in general, of course, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 33.0505617978 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2338.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 493.0 442.535393258 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74239350913 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53405075603 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478701825558 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 732.6 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.10617977528 290% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.1783429986 60.3974514979 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.9 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.65 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.9 5.21951772744 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 7.80617977528 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138243531028 0.243740707755 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.05249500919 0.0831039109588 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0404399239414 0.0758088955206 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.093063529182 0.150359130593 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0227722524637 0.0667264976115 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 100.480337079 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.