Educational institutions should dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
The topic given is controversial and deals with whether educational institutes should dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed or not. Indisputably, the success of the students should be the prime concern for any educational organizations. Nevertheless, the extreme statements of the author to completely dissuade students from their selected majors which the institutions have deemed to be unlikely for their success is not recommended. Thus, it is not surprising to disagree with the author.
First of all, the elucidation of success is ambiguous. Every individual has their own definition of success and pave their way accordingly. Some might consider obtaining lucrative jobs as success while others believe that settling down with family and friends to be success. It is impossible for institutions to take into account all the individual meanings of success to students and it leads them to construct their own characteristics and a system to root out anything that does not contribute to this characteristics. To illustrate, assume a school that believes artful occupations like dancer, musician, painter and so on to be the opposite of success and thoroughly discourages students from participating in these activities. This could potentially wipe out any creativity in children and consequently the next generation. To contradict, assume the same school modified to believe that obtaining high paying jobs to be successful, then every single person would be competing towards these positions and jobs like janitors, teachers, garbage men, waiters, baristas and so on would be vacant or not employed rendering the society with no services.
Additionally, creativity blooms with experience. Experience peaks while encountered with the unexpected or doing things that are not the norm for an individual. Trying new things and experimenting with their surroundings is a faster way to determine the likes and dislikes of the person and shapes everyone differently. But, when the educational system forces every child to follow the same dream or pursue the life style they have deemed to be worthy of their students, it strips these children of their qualities that sets them apart from each other and makes all of them similar and bland. It is much like training every kid to be a obedient robots which all have the same fate to follow.
Furthermore, the freedom of choice is eradicated from the students life in this innovation of educational institutes. Without the freedom to choose or escape the system entrenched with the notion of success of their students rather than their well being or mental happiness, the students may as well be the slaves these educational institutes. Adding to this, the author's claim has portrayed failure to be the woe of humanity but it is just an equal part of life like success. "Failure is a stepping stone to success" is a quote that promotes the mistakes committed as experiences and indeed people learn more from their failures than success. Thomas Elva Edison failed 1000 times before achieving his aim to invent an electric bulb and he proudly stated afterwards that he has discovered 1000 different ways to fail in the invention of the electric bulbs. It is the reason why every student is encouraged to redo their exams after they score low in order to understand where they went wrong. Therefore, the freedom to failure and choose their future helps the students in the long run and leaves them no regrets in life. Embracing the failure encountered in life is the main factor that contributes towards one's success.
Educational system is a complex entity that strives towards betterment of students with many innovation. But the particular one introduces by the author has more drawbacks than advantages. Unless, modifications are administered or additional statements are added to the claim made by the author, it is impossible to their statements seriously. In fact, implementing this system is a dishonor to the choices made by the students and the mistakes that build up to their success.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...t is much like training every kid to be a obedient robots which all have the same...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'robot'?
Suggestion: robot
...ike training every kid to be a obedient robots which all have the same fate to follow....
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...reedom of choice is eradicated from the students life in this innovation of educational ...
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Suggestion: one's
...he main factor that contributes towards ones success. Educational system is a compl...
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Suggestion: many innovations
...ves towards betterment of students with many innovation. But the particular one introduces by t...
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Suggestion:
...ar one introduces by the author has more drawbacks than advantages. Unless, modif...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, may, nevertheless, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, apart from, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.5258426966 169% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 14.8657303371 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 33.0505617978 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 96.0 58.6224719101 164% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3442.0 2235.4752809 154% => OK
No of words: 659.0 442.535393258 149% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22306525038 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.06665523852 4.55969084622 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96864784172 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 323.0 215.323595506 150% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490136570561 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 1070.1 704.065955056 152% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.5342860824 60.3974514979 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.928571429 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5357142857 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28571428571 5.21951772744 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 23.0 10.2758426966 224% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1424305619 0.243740707755 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0437213502988 0.0831039109588 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0736074552188 0.0758088955206 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101731645889 0.150359130593 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103592801462 0.0667264976115 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 164.0 100.480337079 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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