The following advice was given to a politician by his political consultant:It is true that 200 apartment renters protested in the rain about the elimination of rent control regulation. However, there are 20,000 renters in the entire city. 19,800 of them s

The argument that the politician should ignore the protest of the two-hundred renters because it does not represent the opinion of renters throughout the city may sound logical at first, but an analysis of the political consultant's reasons for reaching this conclusion proves that more thorough evidence needs to be given before his conclusion can be considered logical.

Firstly, the political consultant considers the protest "small." Not exactly! Pay attention to the specific assertions. Two-hundred protesters in the rain, says the political consultant, does not demonstrate that there is a problem with the elimination of rent control. One is left to wonder, however, about the context of this protest in the city. If it's the first protest in two or three decades, then surely it is significant. But, if the city has protests often, then it may be disregarded. The size of the protest is also left without context. Two-hundred out of two thousand protesters may not sound like a lot, but, again, if it's the largest protest in the city's history, then two-hundred protesters is by no means "small." A brief context of the city's protesting history would add context to this protest, and could strengthen (or weaken) the consultants conclusion.

Another important point the political advisor made (but failed to support) is that two-hundred protesters doesn't
represent the whole opinion of the renters in the city. While two-hundred is indeed a small portion of twenty-thousand, it can't simply be written off as a minority opinion. It is possible that the end of rent control has only been recently made public, and many other renters do not know about the elimination yet. Also, the advisor fails to address the question of why the other renters didn't protest. He mentions it was raining, but he failed to mention that many of the renters were probably at work or school. The time of the protest is indeed very imporant. Was it on a Friday evening or a Wednesday afternoon? Also, the protest may have been in front of a government building, and most of the apartments could be on the other side of town, and attending a protest could have been impossible for the majority of renters. A few more details explaining why only two-hundred out of twenty-thousand renters protested could significantly strengthen (or, again, weaken) the argument!

Lastly, the political consultant mentions this one protest but fails to mention whether or not it was the only protest that has happened or is planned to happen in response to the elimination of rent control. If this protest is an isolated incident is can be taken more lightly than if it is a string of recent protests. The political consultant also fails to mention whether or not any other protesting activity has been taking place, such as petitions, written pamphlets, or media activity. Surely a protest is one way to express disconent, but it is by no means the only way. A deeper and more broad explanation of all activity in the town responding to the elimination of rent control would add perspective to the overall importance of the protest.

The political consultant has provided a conclusion that needs to be supported more thoroughly before it can be taken seriously or logically.

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Average: 7.8 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 363, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...context of this protest in the city. If its the first protest in two or three decad...
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Line 3, column 644, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...ay not sound like a lot, but, again, if its the largest protest in the citys histor...
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Line 3, column 870, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'consultants'' or 'consultant's'?
Suggestion: consultants'; consultant's
...est, and could strengthen or weaken the consultants conclusion. Another important point ...
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Line 5, column 105, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... support is that two-hundred protesters doesnt represent the whole opinion of the re...
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Line 5, column 111, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rt is that two-hundred protesters doesnt represent the whole opinion of the rente...
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Line 6, column 124, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... a small portion of twenty-thousand, it cant simply be written off as a minority opi...
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Line 6, column 124, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'cants'?
Suggestion: cants
... a small portion of twenty-thousand, it cant simply be written off as a minority opi...
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Line 6, column 389, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...s the question of why the other renters didnt protest. He mentions it was raining, bu...
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Line 8, column 81, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...s this one protest but fails to mention whether or not it was the only protest that has happen...
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Line 8, column 369, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...itical consultant also fails to mention whether or not any other protesting activity has been ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'however', 'if', 'lastly', 'may', 'so', 'then', 'while', 'such as']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.216887417219 0.240241500013 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.165562913907 0.157235817809 105% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0761589403974 0.0880659088768 86% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0662251655629 0.0497285424764 133% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0264900662252 0.0444667217837 60% => OK
Prepositions: 0.112582781457 0.12292977631 92% => OK
Participles: 0.0430463576159 0.0406280797675 106% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.9838499909 2.79330140395 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0248344370861 0.030933414821 80% => OK
Particles: 0.00165562913907 0.0016655270985 99% => OK
Determiners: 0.12582781457 0.0997080785238 126% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.023178807947 0.0249443105267 93% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00827814569536 0.0148568991511 56% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3265.0 2732.02544248 120% => OK
No of words: 540.0 452.878318584 119% => OK
Chars per words: 6.0462962963 6.0361032391 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82057051367 4.58838876751 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.368518518519 0.366273622748 101% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.32037037037 0.280924506359 114% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.214814814815 0.200843997647 107% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.144444444444 0.132149295362 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9838499909 2.79330140395 107% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 219.290929204 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.435185185185 0.48968727796 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 50.6583554531 55.4138127331 91% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6194690265 116% => OK
Sentence length: 22.5 23.380412469 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 81.5705109944 59.4972553346 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.041666667 141.124799967 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 23.380412469 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.674092028746 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.21349557522 192% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 54.537037037 51.4728631049 106% => OK
Elegance: 1.44230769231 1.64882698954 87% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.53295764739 0.391690518653 136% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0934198368722 0.123202303941 76% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0634679928451 0.077325440228 82% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.577632147562 0.547984918172 105% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.214388713525 0.149214159877 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.230735917501 0.161403998019 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114371291688 0.0892212321368 128% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.361961613835 0.385218514788 94% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.137194954546 0.0692045440612 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.324116744448 0.275328986314 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.129096701159 0.0653680567796 197% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.4325221239 29% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 18.0 5.30420353982 339% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88274336283 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 2.0 7.22455752212 28% => More positive topic words wanted.
Negative topic words: 14.0 3.66592920354 382% => Less negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.70907079646 37% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.5995575221 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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