The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
While it might be true that Buckinghum College ought to expand its space for accomadating and attracting more incoming students, making the author's argument fairly plausible. However, a closer scrutiny reveals that the argument is not substantiated by the evidence proffered in the memo.
To begin with, the author asserts that Buchingham College should construct new dormitories because the number of students is predicted to double in the next 50 years. This is problematic because it is really difficult to prescience how many students will there be in that long period of time. Although the school's enrollments are growing currently, this trend is not likely to persist for 50 years.
What is more, adducing the rising cost for renting an apartment in the town, the director of student housing concludes that off-campus housing is less affordable for students. It is not clear that, however, whether the students really find it difficult to live off-campus. In fact, many colleges and universities lies in less rich communities, and the expenditure for off-campus housing can even be lower than that for on-campus ones. Before any further evidence regarding the price for housing in nearby regions is offered, the author's argument simply does not stand.
Last but not least, we do not know whether new dormitories would be attractive for prospective students or not. When choosing which college to apply for, there are a plethora of things students need to consider, teaching quality and reputation of the college being top of them. The author neither convincingly show that the conditions of dormitories are taken seriously by applicants, nor does he or she elucidate how the new dormitories can be a truly fancy attraction standing out among many other factors that sway the students' decisions.
In conclusion, the director of student housing at Buckingham College sees it imperative to build new and attractive dormitories, claiming that students are growing and off-campus housing is getting more expensive. But the memo lacks concrete evidence to espouse the argument, which does not necessitate the building plan at all.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 141, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ting more incoming students, making the authors argument fairly plausible. However, a c...
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Line 3, column 278, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...any students will there be in that long period of time. Although the schools enrollments are g...
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Line 5, column 530, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...using in nearby regions is offered, the authors argument simply does not stand. Last...
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Line 7, column 405, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'elucidates'.
Suggestion: elucidates
...ously by applicants, nor does he or she elucidate how the new dormitories can be a truly ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, really, regarding, while, in conclusion, in fact, to begin with, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1803.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 340.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30294117647 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83504239791 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561764705882 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.740449438202 270% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2334646753 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.785714286 118.986275619 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2857142857 23.4991977007 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.78571428571 5.21951772744 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21285597251 0.243740707755 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0743505205384 0.0831039109588 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804324992712 0.0758088955206 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124775649766 0.150359130593 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0955396042113 0.0667264976115 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.1392134831 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.1639044944 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.