GRE Issue:Claim: The surest indicator of a great nation must be the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists.Reason: Great achievements by a nation's rulers, artists, or scientists will ensure a good life for the majority of that nation's people

What is the criterion evaluating the greatness of a nation? Some people believe it is the achievements of famous rulers, artists and scientists that account for, while others speak high of the welfare of the whole people for the reason that it is the base for the development of the country. In my opinion, when we evaluate the grandeur of a nation, the major consideration is not how rich it is or the number of awards its elites achieve but whether its people are living happy lives. For that reason, I am more in favor of the latter one because the general welfare is a promise for high standard of both material and spiritual living of its people.

The greatness of a nation lies in whether the material needs of its people are met. A great country should be one where people need not worrying about the problem of starvation - even if people lost there job, they could get help to go through the difficulty. A great country should be one where the young need not worry about the fee of universities – they could have the opportunity to receive high education as long as they are willing to. A great country should be one where the old need not worry about the standard of life – even if their children not able to accompany them, they will be cared by relevant department. Satisfying the material needs of its citizen is the basic duty of a nation and the promise of achievement in any field.

The greatness of a nation also lies in whether the spiritual needs of its people are met. More than just satisfying the basic need of its people, a great nation also pay attention to the spirit needs – whether its people have time for entertainment instead of always doing monotonous jobs and whether every member of the country share the fruits of the nation. Equality and fulfillment – these terrific feeling can be got only if the nation regard the general welfare of its people in the first place.

In fact, there exist a beneficial recycle, only if people are satisfied with its nation will they be willing to work hard for the nation so as to create more fortune and to make more achievement. For that matter, the general welfare of the country, the premise for the accomplishment of its people in the area of policy, art and science, should be regarded as a surer indicator in weighing the greatness of a nation.

It is true that the surest indicator of the greatness of a nation is the general welfare of its people. However, still some other factors should be taken into account when weighing the significance of a country. One of these factors is the achievement of its rulers, artists and scientists. Without regulation, the state apparatus cannot run smoothly; without scientific development, the state cannot improve its technology as to create more fortune; without artistic piecework, the state cannot fully satisfy the spirit needs of its people. Never shall we neglect these factors when considering the greatness of a nation – they are just not as important as the welfare of the whole people.

To sum up, general welfare is the surest indicator of the greatness of a nation because it is the promise for the happiness of the people and the premise for the achievement of the nation. Nonetheless, never shall we overemphasize the importance of general welfare for the reason that too much attention may result in people taking it for granted and always hoping the country to do something to improve their living standard instead of working on their own. It is a dangerous signal which may affect the richness and development of the whole country and thus the welfare of its people. When it happens, the welfare of the people is no longer the sign of the grandeur of the nation.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 444, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ucation as long as they are willing to. A great country should be one where the o...
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Line 7, column 138, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... be willing to work hard for the nation so as to create more fortune and to make more ac...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, still, thus, while, as to, in fact, in my opinion, it is true, to sum up, in the first place

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => OK
Preposition: 84.0 58.6224719101 143% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3066.0 2235.4752809 137% => OK
No of words: 653.0 442.535393258 148% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69525267994 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.05508305356 4.55969084622 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57109261971 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 215.323595506 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.378254211332 0.4932671777 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 962.1 704.065955056 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.740449438202 405% => OK
Article: 13.0 4.99550561798 260% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.4995965684 60.3974514979 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.304347826 118.986275619 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3913043478 23.4991977007 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.30434782609 5.21951772744 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.361955876026 0.243740707755 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138904809602 0.0831039109588 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0786220678413 0.0758088955206 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220688535812 0.150359130593 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0372554416686 0.0667264976115 56% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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