Some people believe that studying history enables us to become more familiar to our ancestors since we get to learn their culture and events they went through. However, studying history rather can have the opposite impact of showing a stark contrast between the people living now and people who lived in the earlier times.
Admittedly, we can find some characteristics of contemporary society from our history. For instance, we can find huge stone graves at historical sites during the bronze era. They are the tombs of powerful leaders. Seeing that thousands ago, they had a ruler or leader as well, we can relate their social system to ours. However, nowadays, the social system has changed a lot. The ruler long time ago could brandish his power without check. In contrast, today, presidents are limited in their powers and impeached when they are not supported by the people of the nation. Therefore, it might be hard for us to closely link our society with theirs.
Moreover, when we learn the lifestyles of people who lived earlier period, we can see much difference. People in the ancient days hunted for foods, lived in a tribal society, and wore leather clothes. However, we attain foods from markets, live individually or with our family, and wear clothes made from petroleum and produced in factories. It should be hard to imagine the lives of those people from the perspectives of contemporary people. Thus, the changed lifestyle made me think people who lived in the earlier times were so different from today.
Furthermore, people's perspectives had changed significantly. For example, contemporary people value money and carry them anytime as a bill or credit card. Currency is one of the most important sources to live in the contemporary world. However, the currency did not exist in the ancient times that money would seem like no more than a colored paper to people who lived in those periods. Besides, people in the ancient days believed weather as a signal from God. Therefore, when the weather was worse, they thought it is a punishment from God and religious leaders prayed for forgiving. However, for today's people who predict the weather, it will be just a superstition. Thus, learning history might awaken us how the perspectives of people are significantly changed.
To sum up, the political system, lifestyle, and perspectives had significantly changed throughout the history. From those aspects, we would find contemporary people live in a totally different world compared to those who lived in earlier times. Thus, the study of history would not have a powerful effect to dispel the illusion about the historical times but they will rather emphasize the differences between the contemporary people and the ancestors.
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Essay evaluation report
This essay has the correct way for arguments.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 451 350
No. of Characters: 2235 1500
No. of Different Words: 220 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.608 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.956 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.615 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 169 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.346 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.439 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.692 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.306 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.478 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.157 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eople who lived in the earlier times. Admittedly, we can find some characteri...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, in contrast, in fact, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2307.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 451.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11529933481 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71201906679 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505543237251 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 718.2 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.3118157912 60.3974514979 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.7307692308 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3461538462 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.19230769231 5.21951772744 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.83258426966 290% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288753327054 0.243740707755 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0845020598207 0.0831039109588 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0775555025876 0.0758088955206 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195406348012 0.150359130593 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0879801163844 0.0667264976115 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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