Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain.Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position

The nature is seriously damaged comparing to the past. So that the attempts to preserve the remained nature is necessary. However, the same measures for all the nations in the world are not reasonable. Because there are two different kinds of countries. First group is developed countries. They are already overly developed. So that, the mandatory actions for these countries to reserve the environment seems reasonable. However, if we think of the less developed nations, the same actions appears to be inappropriate.

In the case the nation is overdeveloped, so that the degree of development threaten the sustainable environment, the attempts to preserve the remained wildness are seriously required. Because unless the government prohibit the unduly development, the excessive deprivation of the nature in the region would not stop in virtue of the strong desire to make profit For example, at the nascent period of industrial revolution, many countries only concentrated on development regardless of the future effect on environment. In result, many European countries had to suffer environmental problems. Only after the legal restrictions were acted, the environment could be recovered.

However, there are not well-developed countries only in the world. When we consider the nations underdeveloped as much as the basic requirements to enjoy civilization are not established, the attempts to preserve the wildness seems to be not implausible. In this case, the development of wildness would be more reasonable and beneficial for the people. Because the some level of development is needed for man to live as man.

Moreover, to build up the sustainable environment which ensures the happiness and utility for people and harmony with other creature over the world at the same time, the development to the certain degree is necessary. Because the energy technology supporting the feasibility of the harmonious environment involves the field of high technologies which are only possible to be invented in the advanced nations. To make sustainable environment require cooperation between all over the world, the underdeveloped countries need to be encouraged to develop their wildness to the certain level.

In addition, it is not fair to imbue same duty to preserve the remained wildness. Because the developed countries at now are responsible for the condition of the damaged environment. With the early industrialization they could secure wealth and power, and they have enjoyed flourish over long period by depriving the resource and potentiality of the less developed countries. In this process, they have influenced negative effect on the environment. In comparing to the countries, the underdeveloped nations have less responsibility for the condition of the polluted nature. Therefore, mandatory actions to preserve the left wildness in the less responsible countries is not righteous measure.

Therefore, although preservation of the nature is needed, the approaches to the issue should vary depending on the condition of the nations.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, for example, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 33.0505617978 42% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2594.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 467.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.55460385439 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22353670962 2.79657885939 115% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45182012848 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 827.1 704.065955056 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 13.0 4.99550561798 260% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 11.0 3.10617977528 354% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 68.172293041 60.3974514979 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.7692307692 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9615384615 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.88461538462 5.21951772744 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202267129613 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0595283331294 0.0831039109588 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0366086959635 0.0758088955206 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112083012747 0.150359130593 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0271210916 0.0667264976115 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.1392134831 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 48.8420337079 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.61 12.1639044944 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 100.480337079 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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