Nowadays, by increasing the rate of development, new technological devices help people to deal with their problems. The most debating effect of those devices is that they may deteriorate the rule of human in calculation procedure. From my perspective, I mostly believe that the argument is true and in what follows I will attempt to address the most discernible reasons.
The first exquisite point which deserves some words to mention is that calculation process has been shorten tremendously and this would encourage humans to neglect their natural ability and in consequence hurt their mind. Accordingly, my brother, told me about this condition when he was working as an accountant in a bank. He says, when he was a young man, about 10 years ago, he was an outstanding student in the university, however, whenever he recruited in the bank and since he needed to calculate a large amount of data every day, calculators and other technological devices such as Matlab program, started to be use instead of his mind. Hence, today, he suffers from amnesia and his doctor told him that the main cause is mind-freezing. Therefore, technological devices deteriorate human mind's share.
Another point to mention is that the ease of calculation would provide others beneficiaries with draw people attention. Indeed, people who are encountering large amount of data calculation and interpretation may feel tired after a month or two. The potential substitution for these humans are using technological devises. Nevertheless, based on the medical reports, humans' mind have reciprocal relationships with their working environment and studying habits. Accordingly, as much as a person uses technological devices for the sake of ease to get rid of calculation, the share of mind in calculation decreases gradually. The reports point out that as time as people freeze their mind in mathematical calculation the weight of their mind reduces yearly. Consequently, new technological devices degrade humans' mind share.
However, people could pursue both sides by planning precisely. In this approach booth calculation and human's mind can take advantages. My university professor is the best example regarding this issue. As an professional engineer, he design structural elements and also apartment using both technological devices and individually. In this approach, a computer program, design whole structure and a person inspect the procedure step-by-step. An engineer doesn’t have to design all the element but some. Hence, this approach keeps mind of engineer fresh and also implement technological devices.
All in all, as the above-mentioned examples have illustrated, mostly, people lose some of their minds if the try to rely only on technological devices for ease of calculation of speed rate, albeit a good plan would eliminate negative effects.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 101, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'shortened'.
Suggestion: shortened
...on is that calculation process has been shorten tremendously and this would encourage h...
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Line 7, column 205, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...e best example regarding this issue. As an professional engineer, he design struct...
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Line 7, column 234, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'designs'.
Suggestion: designs
... issue. As an professional engineer, he design structural elements and also apartment ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, regarding, so, therefore, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2418.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 443.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45823927765 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16277875339 2.79657885939 113% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55079006772 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 757.8 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 62.1407025927 60.3974514979 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.130434783 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2608695652 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08695652174 5.21951772744 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101944698811 0.243740707755 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0356067485805 0.0831039109588 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0304958583317 0.0758088955206 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0630112804009 0.150359130593 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0222776027078 0.0667264976115 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.1639044944 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 100.480337079 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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