As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
The statement lies on the assumption that reliance leads to vulnerability, which is also applied to human dependence on technological devices. Admittedly, we are familiar with the negative perspectives raised by conservative parties that technology is likely to damage humanity as it supplants the inherent elements of mental and physical activities. This tendency of denying significant discrepancies in the environment and the definition of human activity can be thought of as a natural response, as almost all living things dread essential changes in their surviving conditions. However, several misleading effects of overly dependent patterns of technology usage notwithstanding, the given assumption lacks significant insights for further discussion in terms of development. The following reasons show how technology may be an effective opportunity to enhance the potential of human capability.
Firstly, history proves that humanity has evolved through an excessive usage of tools which are exterior to our innate conditions. Obviously, the cultural devices that we now depend upon are originally the results of creative activities initiated by arduous research. For example, locomotive technology that drove the industrial civilization led to the invention of massive transportation and today’s globalization as well. Material conditions in which we reside consist of numerous accumulated technological innovations, and only through these technologies are we able to sustain social life. That is, opposite to the belief that our thoughts may deteriorate due to reliance, technology aids us to facilitate critical thinking, actively communicating with one another, and igniting new patterns of thoughts. Just remember the famous opening scene of the film Space Odyssey 2001 where a chimpanzee - known as our last common ancestors - clenches up a piece of bone in order to use it as its tool. The overwhelming revelation is conveyed through the screen, allowing us to think about the wonder of the tortuous courses of the development in technology.
Secondly, technology entails ever changing challenges which require us to be constantly alerted by what is happening around us. For example, the emergence of smart cars and the concept of an air taxi urged us to reconsider fundamental issues related to transportation. To which extent are we able to travel and what are our terrestrial boundaries? What are the philosophical shifts due to the allowance of vertical and horizontal movement? And more importantly, how much are we responsible for the unwanted harms that happen to the environment? Excessive construction of railroads and transportation hubs, massive usage of fossil fuels led to an irrevocable destruction in natural resources. As the climate change that we are now experiencing every moment has become an urgent task, it has become impossible not to take full responsibility to resolve the problems. Thus, technology has not led to critical idleness but indeed to enlarged scales of thoughts.
As such, in contrast to the statement, we can see how technology has emancipated human imagination. Technology will always mark the human experience, from the discovery of fire to the implementation of nanotechnology. Given the history of the human race, there will be no limite to the number of problems, both new and old, for us to tackle. There is no need to retreat to a Luddite attitude to new things, but rather embrace a hopeful posture to the possibilities that technology provides for new avenues of human imagination.
- Some people believe that scientific discoveries have given us a much better understanding of the world around us Others believe that science has revealed to us that the world is infinitely more complex than we ever realized 66
- Claim Researchers should not limit their investigations to only those areas in which they expect to discover something that has an immediate practical application Reason It is impossible to predict the outcome of a line of research with any certainty 83
- If a goal is worthy then any means taken to attain it are justifiable 79
- Although innovations such as video computers and the Internet seem to offer schools improved methods for instructing students these technologies all too often distract from real learning 79
- Some people argue that successful leaders in government industry or other fields must be highly competitive Other people claim that in order to be successful a leader must be willing and able to cooperate with others 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 898, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for example, in contrast, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 84.0 58.6224719101 143% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 12.9106741573 225% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3000.0 2235.4752809 134% => OK
No of words: 545.0 442.535393258 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50458715596 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83169070408 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.28320907768 2.79657885939 117% => OK
Unique words: 308.0 215.323595506 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565137614679 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 975.6 704.065955056 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.8716656812 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.0 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7083333333 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95833333333 5.21951772744 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179729881091 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0480737472213 0.0831039109588 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0380067871028 0.0758088955206 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10879761485 0.150359130593 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0376064815863 0.0667264976115 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 48.8420337079 66% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.92 12.1639044944 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.94 8.38706741573 119% => OK
difficult_words: 180.0 100.480337079 179% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.5 11.8971910112 139% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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