Human behavior is a product of life-long experiences. These experiences are good or bad depending on the outcome of our actions. Actions and thoughts from which they stem are largely controlled by us, however outcomes of these actions are not in our control. Unarguably, no matter the efforts of man the results are always beyond control. The behavior of a man depends on a variety of factors beyond his control. Behaviors of all men are affected by the power structures of society ranging from culture, home, and work of which they are a part. Additionally, time also plays a great role in affecting our overall behaviors, experiences that take part earlier in life are bound to affect our behaviors more than those that happen recently. Interestingly, free will at this point may appear to be an illusion but simply is a flexibility to choose between behavioral patterns shaped with biases from previous experiences.
We find that man is all but bound to the ecosystems of society of which he is a part of; be it the culture or faith to which he is born, the employment or work he takes up for his bread and butter or the social cliques of which he is a part and whose expectations he tries to meet inevitably affect his behaviors. These colossal structures complete with their intricacies are beyond control of any man that has walked on earth. Cultures complete with their customs and beliefs provide the first and most significant experiences to the person and shape his behaviors followed by faith, education, and work. Additionally, social networks whom we choose to be a part of shape our behaviors with peer pressure. When a child is born religion and traditions at home decide his first behaviors he will have when he moves to school there the teachers as administrators dictate their expectations together with his peers and when he finally moves to work hegemony in the markets and employment dictate his behavior.
Additionally, we find that time together with various occurrences of life also affects how we behave. Incidences that happen earlier in our life have a more important role in shaping our behaviors when compared against incidences that take place recently. Moreover, it happens to be the case that as we progress in our lives our behavioral patterns become more rigid and are unlikely to change by circumstances until we face some remarkable events. A child born into troublesome home or if he faces bullying at school is more likely to face anxiety and depression , and may even go on to exhibit antisocial behaviors in future when compared to a person that did not face such harsh treatment. Further, when such a person goes on to become a adult man such experiences do not leave him and haunt him forever.
Contrastingly, the above discussion makes us question the concept of free-will. Conscience or as it is called will inarguably is an integral part of our behavior. However, when dig deeper we find that this free will is an illusion, a convoluted product of experiences that allows us to choose to react in a certain way based on previous biases to a situation, essentially a choice between preconceived notions rather than the ability to construct new ones. Closest thing to free will exists only in infants as their brains are devoid of experiences and ends with the first experience, which is the onset of behavior.
In conclusion, we can say that forces larger than man create experiences, which in turn lead to behaviors not the other way around. Our behavior is determined by societal power structures ranging from cultures to education and work, along with peer pressure. Additionally, time produces rigid behavioral patterns based of situations we faced earlier in our life. Unbeknownst to us free will remains an illusion encapsulating previous bias within itself.
- College students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field 66
- 23 Governments should place few if any restrictions on scientific research and development 83
- Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free 75
- Students should always question what they are taught instead of accepting it passively 66
- When old buildings stand on ground that modern planners feel could be better used for modern purposes modern development should be given precedence over the preservation of historic buildings 75
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 28.0 11.3162921348 247% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 71.0 33.0505617978 215% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 99.0 58.6224719101 169% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3180.0 2235.4752809 142% => OK
No of words: 642.0 442.535393258 145% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95327102804 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.03365860172 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8510540506 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 294.0 215.323595506 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.457943925234 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 999.0 704.065955056 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.7120722178 60.3974514979 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.307692308 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6923076923 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.76923076923 5.21951772744 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122606224711 0.243740707755 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0391456187861 0.0831039109588 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0294219812335 0.0758088955206 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0760494241507 0.150359130593 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0238776493833 0.0667264976115 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 150.0 100.480337079 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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