People should undertake risky action only after they have carefully considered its consequences.
It is debatable whether people ought to exert risky actions only after they have pondered about the possible outcomes. In order to engender the most ideal situation, it is desirable for people to make dangerous decisions only after careful premeditation.
To begin with, risky actions could have detriments as time goes by. Risky actions have an implication of negative consequences. They are considered risky because they have higher tendency to have failed results. Thus, even though there is no presence of visible damage currently, there could be bigger damage in the future especially if dangerous decisions were made without careful consideration. Take Enron Scandal as an example. Enron was a successful energy company, but with failed deals and projects, the company inevitably had to declare bankruptcy. However, the executives undertook risky action by refusing to declare bankruptcy to maintain their fame and wealth. It seemed alright for a while; nevertheless, their deception was revealed, and at that point, there was no possibility of recovery at all. Had executives of Enron company ruminated about the future consequence of refusal of bankruptcy, it would not have been that difficult for them to figure out that current okay situation would not last long. Considering the future is essential since situations change as time changes.
Moreover, people should engage in risky demeanor only after careful speculation about the outcomes because outcomes are immensely affected by the person who is undertaking risky actions. Who is involved in a dangerous situation is a very important matter since that can change everything. Just because one decision worked for a certain person, it does not mean that decision will work for everyone. To illustrate this, take Bill Gates as an instance for this case. Bill Gates, one of the more influential figure worldwide, who is a CEO of an IT company, dropped out of Harvard College since he sought no meaning in continuing his education. After the drop out, he led his company, Microsoft, into a huge success. Nevertheless, would it work for every other person is questionable. The risky action Bill Gates undertook yielded huge success to him, but it will not necessarily so to many other people; in fact, it has higher tendency to engender detrimental results if people drop out of school. Therefore, who is undertaking the risky action is a crucial factor, which is why people should carefully consider the possible consequences before making a risky decisions.
Nonetheless, admittedly, under emergency, there is not enough time given to people for enough ponderation. Even in those situations, however, people should gather and discuss about the possible outcomes as much as possible to effectively diminish the damage. Any actions could be risky in under emergency, but even with little premeditation and analysis about the results, people could lead the detriments to minimum.
All in all, because of aforementioned reasons, people ought to premeditate before undertaking risky actions.
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Comments
Could you please tell me how
Could you please tell me how my score can go up for this one?
Better to put short examples.
Better to put short examples. Maximum two sentences are enough for an example.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Nonetheless, admittedly, under emergency, there is not enough time given to people for enough ponderation.
Error: ponderation Suggestion: No alternate word
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arguments: OK
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flaws:
The e-grader told that it is off the topic because the examples are long.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 481 350
No. of Characters: 2504 1500
No. of Different Words: 236 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.683 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.206 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.753 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 196 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 145 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 99 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 68 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.24 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.006 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.48 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.282 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.462 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.109 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Which I don't understand. I
Which I don't understand. I've had longer examples before and e-grader has never given me 1/6 for that.
The e-grader will match the
The e-grader will match the string of the essay topic to essay content. when the essay topic is short:
People should undertake risky action only after they have carefully considered its consequences.
it will completely confuse the e-grader when you put long examples like:
Take Enron Scandal as an example. Enron was a successful energy company...
the e-grader will think they are not related. Then think it is off the topic. The e-grader doesn't work well all the time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 540, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'an' or 'IT'?
Suggestion: an; IT
...ntial figure worldwide, who is a CEO of an IT company, dropped out of Harvard College...
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Line 5, column 546, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'companies'?
Suggestion: companies
...figure worldwide, who is a CEO of an IT company, dropped out of Harvard College since h...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1158, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'decision'?
Suggestion: decision
...ible consequences before making a risky decisions. Nonetheless, admittedly, under eme...
^^^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'nevertheless', 'nonetheless', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'while', 'in fact', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.230627306273 0.240241500013 96% => OK
Verbs: 0.151291512915 0.157235817809 96% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0977859778598 0.0880659088768 111% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0608856088561 0.0497285424764 122% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0350553505535 0.0444667217837 79% => OK
Prepositions: 0.129151291513 0.12292977631 105% => OK
Participles: 0.0313653136531 0.0406280797675 77% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.87319591657 2.79330140395 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0313653136531 0.030933414821 101% => OK
Particles: 0.00184501845018 0.0016655270985 111% => OK
Determiners: 0.0848708487085 0.0997080785238 85% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0276752767528 0.0249443105267 111% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0110701107011 0.0148568991511 75% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3062.0 2732.02544248 112% => OK
No of words: 481.0 452.878318584 106% => OK
Chars per words: 6.3659043659 6.0361032391 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.58838876751 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.413721413721 0.366273622748 113% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.313929313929 0.280924506359 112% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.234927234927 0.200843997647 117% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.151767151767 0.132149295362 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87319591657 2.79330140395 103% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 219.290929204 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507276507277 0.48968727796 104% => OK
Word variations: 59.2319989582 55.4138127331 107% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6194690265 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.24 23.380412469 82% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8968874265 59.4972553346 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.48 141.124799967 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.24 23.380412469 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.48 0.674092028746 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.21349557522 58% => OK
Readability: 50.6329313929 51.4728631049 98% => OK
Elegance: 1.58208955224 1.64882698954 96% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192418698034 0.391690518653 49% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0978059146498 0.123202303941 79% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0663423002237 0.077325440228 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.436339497158 0.547984918172 80% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.193457586317 0.149214159877 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0673100227569 0.161403998019 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0803495221554 0.0892212321368 90% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.250918784848 0.385218514788 65% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0728199406264 0.0692045440612 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122743324315 0.275328986314 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0483214782164 0.0653680567796 74% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.4325221239 48% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 18.0 5.30420353982 339% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88274336283 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 3.0 7.22455752212 42% => OK
Negative topic words: 13.0 3.66592920354 355% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.5995575221 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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