The statement asserts that our behavior is largely attributed to the surrounding force around us governing our life rather than our own personal choice. It is conspicuous that our life is much more controlled by so much extraneous parameters like society, religion, culture, etiquette, responsibilities along with some other factors than by our own conscience & that's why I agree with that statement along with some qualifications.
From Darwin's evolution theory we learned about apes from where we are descended & if we take that theory to be true than we can see that the apes live a life of simple upbringing, without sophistication. On the other hand, we mankind entangled our life with lot of restrictions along with many maudlin issues. Apes can have a life of their own without any complexity as they do not have to worry who is bullying them, who is getting a better house, a better car. In contrast, we live a life of confinement, relentlessly trying to solve the equations of the terrestrial issues around us. Here my point to draw the issue of apes is that we human are making our life more complicated by so many factors, forces & those forces are governing our life rather than our mind but if there was not those complexities than we may had the life of freedom & could have followed what our soul wanted.
When a child is born, its instincts is not controlled by the surroundings around it rather than its subconscious mind. But as by getting old the child turns into a boy & find that the world around him is not the world he wanted to be rather it is much more complicated. Society, culture, religion & family gradually debilitates his fledgling mind & force him to face the reality. Behavior & view towards life changes with the passage of time, he is forced to shrink his wishes toward the world.
If we look towards the south Asian subcontinent we can see that here a person grows up with much more difficulty as they have to maintain a lot of parameters. A girl can not have a night out with her friends because her society, religion most of the time does not allow it. Additionally she has to overcome a lot of barriers if she wants to establish herself as an independent woman. When we were born, we had not faced those difficulties & thus were driven by our mind but by time our mind become inured by the extraneous pressure & gradually we start to follow a path elicited by our surroundings consciously or subconsciously. We are trying to be social by being isolated by those forces. Though sometimes exceptions occurs, likewise if we look at the developed countries where people are more free & can pursue the pleasure of their mind. Moreover, restrictions are not all the time what wins over our emotions, our mind. That is why sometimes we cry, we laugh, sometimes we do things which don't follow any mundane equation, any restriction.
So, finally we can't that say we don't drive us but we have to admit that our action, behavior are qualified by the restrictions, pressures which controls our behavior.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...er factors than by our own conscience & thats why I agree with that statement along w...
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Line 5, column 58, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding surroundings'?
Suggestion: the surrounding surroundings
...orn, its instincts is not controlled by the surroundings around it rather than its subconscious mind. But ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Additionally,
...ion most of the time does not allow it. Additionally she has to overcome a lot of barriers i...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... we laugh, sometimes we do things which dont follow any mundane equation, any restri...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...on, any restriction. So, finally we cant that say we dont drive us but we have t...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...on. So, finally we cant that say we dont drive us but we have to admit that our ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'if', 'likewise', 'look', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'thus', 'as to', 'in contrast', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.204467353952 0.240241500013 85% => OK
Verbs: 0.178694158076 0.157235817809 114% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0584192439863 0.0880659088768 66% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0618556701031 0.0497285424764 124% => OK
Pronouns: 0.111683848797 0.0444667217837 251% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.13058419244 0.12292977631 106% => OK
Participles: 0.0429553264605 0.0406280797675 106% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.81598460528 2.79330140395 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0240549828179 0.030933414821 78% => OK
Particles: 0.00515463917526 0.0016655270985 309% => Less particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0824742268041 0.0997080785238 83% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0120274914089 0.0249443105267 48% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.020618556701 0.0148568991511 139% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3041.0 2732.02544248 111% => OK
No of words: 536.0 452.878318584 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.67350746269 6.0361032391 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81161862636 4.58838876751 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.289179104478 0.366273622748 79% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.214552238806 0.280924506359 76% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.164179104478 0.200843997647 82% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.119402985075 0.132149295362 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81598460528 2.79330140395 101% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 219.290929204 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475746268657 0.48968727796 97% => OK
Word variations: 56.2426792663 55.4138127331 101% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6194690265 97% => OK
Sentence length: 26.8 23.380412469 115% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.8477403032 59.4972553346 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.05 141.124799967 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8 23.380412469 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.6 0.674092028746 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.21349557522 115% => OK
Readability: 48.2552238806 51.4728631049 94% => OK
Elegance: 1.07317073171 1.64882698954 65% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209236327604 0.391690518653 53% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.10643641453 0.123202303941 86% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0783999667402 0.077325440228 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.527337183051 0.547984918172 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.184516355865 0.149214159877 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.079864624346 0.161403998019 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0479354507875 0.0892212321368 54% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.304885575766 0.385218514788 79% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0351197710218 0.0692045440612 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131155202304 0.275328986314 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0299475405485 0.0653680567796 46% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.4325221239 86% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.30420353982 113% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88274336283 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 7.22455752212 125% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.66592920354 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 13.5995575221 96% => OK
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It is not right on the topic in the view of e-grader.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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