People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
When we introspect ourselves, we may find that we have unique attributes and eccentries. What are the factors determine what character and attribute we posses? This is quiet debatable. Here, the author of the prompt explicitly asserts that the character we posses is due to external factor rather than personal one. I mostly agree with the contention and defend my thesis pointing out two arguments with evidences. I also present a concession when my thesis may be dramatically subverted in some scenario.
Firstly, the character anyone possess till now is culmination of various external factors effecting the person and the character is largely depend upon the external environment he is living in rather than that of entrenched attributes he had got from the birth. By reacting to various external factors, the character building process starts from day of birth and never stops in life. So as a result of this process, character largely depend upon the environment, time and scenario he is living in. For instance, the character possessed by rich kid is different from that of rustic one. Similarly, character possessed by orphan is different from that of children having parents. So, external factor helps shaping individual's character by constantly testing the individual at various stage of his life.
Secondly, if we dive deep into the concept of evolution, we may find that mutation acts as advantageous trait for survival. While it is true that the characters any being possess are inherited from parents; however, without modification of character, it may will not adapt to the sorrounding it is living in. So, mutation is gravely essential for any living being to change previously flawed characters inherited and acquire new trait for surviving the sorrounding. This concept also plays great role in character building process our ordinary life as well. It is our nature to develop character based on our sorrounding so that we survive the environment we are exposed in.
Admittedly, since all have free-will, it is our responsibility to build strong character so that we adjust in our sorrounding. Having freedom may act as both merit and demerit for the individual. For instance, exposure depressing environment may lead to similarly dolorous and emotional character in the individual. Similarly, billegerent environment may lead to establishing similar argumentative character. Hence, it is individual's own responsibility to expose in more optimum sorrounding.
In conclusion, the subject matter is moot and there are no easy answers. But, glancing on juxtaposition of two opposing view and also due to aforementioned reasons, the external environment is more likely to shape any one than that of his own making. However, it is personal responsibility to identify and expose optimum environment for individual to live in.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 31, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'anyone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'possesses'.
Suggestion: possesses
...ario. Firstly, the character anyone possess till now is culmination of various exte...
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Line 3, column 141, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'depended'.
Suggestion: depended
...the person and the character is largely depend upon the external environment he is liv...
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Line 3, column 705, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to shape' or 'shape'.
Suggestion: to shape; shape
...ving parents. So, external factor helps shaping individuals character by constantly tes...
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Line 9, column 215, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'anyone'?
Suggestion: anyone
...nal environment is more likely to shape any one than that of his own making. However, i...
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Line 9, column 361, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... environment for individual to live in.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, similarly, so, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2402.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 450.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33777777778 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06525249197 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497777777778 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 764.1 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.410906179 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.08 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 23.4991977007 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.21951772744 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0348871431371 0.243740707755 14% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0110555353499 0.0831039109588 13% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0233448487504 0.0758088955206 31% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0236032302089 0.150359130593 16% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.018454276265 0.0667264976115 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 100.480337079 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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