Schools play a very important role in shaping how a child perceives themselves and everything around them. They shape our beliefs, our ideas and our understanding of what is important in life. Schools instill a lot of important values such as honesty, integrity and team work in their students. However, more than all of this, what schools - and our education system as a whole - believes to be the most important aspect of a child's education is just academics. And while a strong academic understanding is inarguably important, is rote learning complicated mathematical formulas and historical facts more important than teaching students life skills, ethics and the ability to express themselves? While traditional methods of teaching and examination have sufficed in the past, in a modern world marked by constant shifts in economy, technology and environment, this system is no longer enough.
Adulthood is mostly based on understanding of non-academic aspects rather than academic subject knowledge and thus this should be the main focus of schools as well. As soon as students start living an independent life, they are faced with a plethora of issues such as filing taxes, paying rent or mortgage for property, managing funds and handling the stress or anxiety that comes with adulthood responsibilities. Preparing a student to face these issues and educating them about how to combat them during their school years can help students be become well-informed, functional adults who can easily acclimatise to the society. Knowledge about finance, the current economic situations, providing help during emergency medical situations and other necessary life skills, if taught in school, can help students save themselves from financial scams, economic crises and even other people's lives.
Furthermore, schools encourage their students to focus more on academics even if it's at the cost of sacrificing their passion. I have personally seen a lot of my classmates give up their passion of pursuing athletics, music, acting or other co-curriculars just so they could devote more time on academics. However, after approaching adulthood one can often understand the value of these co-curricular activities. Pursuing one's hobbies such as sports or music is recommended to help reduce stress and anxiety and increase one's focus.
Now, one might argue that teaching life skills and all other non-academic expertise should be taught outside of school, at home, while schools should focus on academics to prepare students for their careers. While there are some advantages to this argument - like parents would know their children better than school authorities and thus give them personalised training for the knowledge they lack, there are also a number of cons for this idea. Not all students have similar kind
of family situation and thus it is more constructive and equalising to have schools teach such non-academic aspects.
In conclusion, while a basic knowledge of all subject matters is important to function in the society, there is much more it takes to becoming a well rounded member of the society. Examining all students with varied interests, skills and intellect according to how well they can learn up the same textbook material does not provide a standardised method for testing how well a student can do in life. Thus, the education system in schools needs to adapt according to the modern times to prepare students for the lives they are actually going to lead in the future.
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- People should question the rules of authority as opposed to accepting them passively Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take In developing and 83
- People should question the rules of authority as opposed to accepting them passively Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take In developing and 66
- Schools should do more to prepare students for the non academic aspects of adulthood 66
- The city council of Town X has proposed reducing the city s electric expenses by switching all the lights in public buildings from incandescent bulbs to light emitting diodes LEDs The switch would be made gradually as the old incandescent bulbs burn 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'focus'.
Suggestion: focus
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...hese co-curricular activities. Pursuing ones hobbies such as sports or music is reco...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...idea. Not all students have similar kind of family situation and thus it is more ...
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Line 6, column 285, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to up'
Suggestion: to up
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, furthermore, however, if, so, still, thus, well, while, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2937.0 2235.4752809 131% => OK
No of words: 556.0 442.535393258 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28237410072 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85588840946 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86451051483 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 290.0 215.323595506 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521582733813 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 906.3 704.065955056 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4723498616 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.85 118.986275619 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8 23.4991977007 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7 5.21951772744 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36503109215 0.243740707755 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103542251048 0.0831039109588 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.093869195149 0.0758088955206 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193018558023 0.150359130593 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0704085950498 0.0667264976115 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 14.1392134831 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 149.0 100.480337079 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.