The above statement talks about people`s believe on college student on choosing a field of their interest and on the availability of jobs in that field. I believe on student should consider only on their talents and interest when choosing their study.Its the field they can be best than they are in other. However,we can also see students having better future in choosing the field on the availability of jobs.
We can see different people born with different interest and talent. they are special in their own way. if students follow their talents and their interest then they do better in their field. they just need to work on it and nothing can stop them from achieving it. Lets talk about a singer who has a melodious voice and he/she is so good at it that everyone loves that voice. She can make her career through singing only. No one can steal that from her and there is no fear for him/her that their job will be seized.What if she had joined the field running after the availability of jobs??? would she be able to give her 100% on the job? She could earn a lot of money but she wouldn`t feel complete and satisfied from that job as she would be from being a singer. Being on that job ,she wouldnt have gained name and fame that she gained from singing. In the field of our talent, we work on 100% to give our best and to flourish ourself. On those basis we can improve ourself to a better version than we are today. Those people are the lucky one who develop their own talent into their own career. Not everybody are gifted with talent. so,on this basis i prefer to choose talents.
Secondly,i wanna talk about scientist who invent new things and give name to it in this world. They are the most intellligent persons in this world.They went to the field of their talent and were able to create history.If they were running after the job then we wouldnt be able to see such inventions. People should understand they are two different things. there is a rare case that people have failed who followed their dreams of interest and talent.
However, not everybody are born with talent and they have to be in some specific job to earn for their living. And not everybody follows their talent due to many circumstances like their family status,lack of support,etc. So there are many areas to be considered too.anyway, i would again say that just follow your talent and interest . there is no such force that can separate you from your inner instinct and your talent.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, but, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 78.0 33.0505617978 236% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 12.9106741573 8% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2042.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 446.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57847533632 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35867186845 2.79657885939 84% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.45067264574 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 615.6 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 6.24550561798 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.6959975659 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.5384615385 118.986275619 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1538461538 23.4991977007 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5 5.21951772744 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 30.0 7.80617977528 384% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 10.2758426966 195% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36427508328 0.243740707755 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107606392733 0.0831039109588 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.131671371006 0.0758088955206 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.268883996813 0.150359130593 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.201488548858 0.0667264976115 302% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 14.1392134831 62% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 48.8420337079 146% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.1743820225 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 12.1639044944 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.85 8.38706741573 82% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 100.480337079 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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