Some people believe that in order to thrive, a society must put its own overall success before the well-being of its individual citizens. Others believe that the well-being of a society can only be measured by the general welfare of all its people.Write a

As we are discussing the essay about the countries development that in order to thrive, which one should be prior to another between the well-being of all the its people and overall success of a country, I reckon this should be based on the view of developing. So I belive a country should not ignore both of the two aspects as they are all significant to a countries' prosperity. More over, the balance between the success of a country and welfare of the people depends on the level of the country which related to several cases. In this world, there are still some countries led by trieves of tribe as well as even dictators hence the requriements among so many countries vary in different way. As it is our common wish to make the world bettter and better, we should consider this question separately. I will address my view in three points.

To begin with, the welfare of all its people is the final target of a democratic country. People voting for the party to lead their country is based on the party, or to be specific, the leader will rule the nation and guide the development of it as to make more progress in order to bring the better life to the people. Here I should apprase the Chinese Government which led billions of the people out of poverty as well as on the path to the well-being life. Great changes has taken place during these 40 years of development of the society. However, it costs much. At the expense of so many faliures as well as tolerance with other countries which disturb the normal order of the world. While as the belief of the generations of leaders of China kept, focus on development of ours and do not being disturbed by outside environment, Chinese people gained the unbelievable development of the society which considered as miralcle by foreign countries. Indeed, Chinese lots some land to Japan as well as Russia which coveted by the for years, while now the world is refreshed by the change of China, the people with more money can take travel by high speed trains which at length of eighty thousand kilometers as some developed country just began the high speed projects. The well-being of people and the society is the final concern of China, even if at expense of some faliure in certain areas.

In addtion, as we should use the developing view to consider the world as the rapid changes take place everywhere in our society. So any country should not stop chasing for the success of the country lest abandoned by the fast-chaning world. Recently the many country just started the 5G standard making as to take the first place in the mobile comunication area in the future, it is a war without gunfire as everyone in this game know who rule the standard , so it can rule the future mobile Internet and Information Technology field, the significant area now and future.

Finally, as my concern, a country should locate its level among the coutries of the wolrd,like China ,once poor and weak, while it took a good exapmle for the developing countries in that the belief of keeping calm and developing forever is practical and feasible, it would inspire more and more countries to imitate. More over, as the atuthority should know that besides the welfare of people, the power of the country is also significant.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 42, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'countries'' or 'country's'?
Suggestion: countries'; country's
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Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'its'?
Suggestion: the; its
...o another between the well-being of all the its people and overall success of a country...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'countries'' or 'country's'?
Suggestion: countries'; country's
...spects as they are all significant to a countries prosperity. More over, the balance betw...
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... the rapid changes take place everywhere in our society. So any country should no...
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...cently the many country just started the 5G standard making as to take the first...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, finally, first, hence, however, if, so, still, well, while, as to, i reckon, as well as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 90.0 58.6224719101 154% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2690.0 2235.4752809 120% => OK
No of words: 576.0 442.535393258 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67013888889 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89897948557 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5402467028 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 215.323595506 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.447916666667 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 850.5 704.065955056 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.10617977528 290% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.8195969708 60.3974514979 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.5 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8 23.4991977007 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85 5.21951772744 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205204638868 0.243740707755 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0692328413716 0.0831039109588 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0797973627141 0.0758088955206 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117254768142 0.150359130593 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0901536872795 0.0667264976115 135% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.4 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 100.480337079 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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