Knowledge and skills have been most vital parts of the humankind to survie in such a cruel world. Combining various kinds of tools and intelligence provided by the individuals of the community, problems and difficulties have been possible to be overcomed. With this reliance on the information gathered from the environment, some argue that the complexity of the issue is boosted by the amount of information since it prevents humankind to reach a solution by using well-structured solution approach. In other words, tremendously high amount of knowledge makes it hard to organize information. For instance, the movement of electrons in a current made scientists who were able to gather new information struggled a lot. While one part of the scientists believed that the current moves directly, others suggested that current has parallel structure called AC. Therefore, the solution has been postponed because of increased complexity. However, besides increased complexity, information leads us to be able to analyze different results in a more accurate manner. To explain with other words, the confusion that the scientists have faced while they were working on electrons movement didn't occured because of high amount of information, since there weren't enough information and experimental capabilities during that times, scientists couldn't end the discussion by observing reality.
To begin with, acquiring knowledge helps humankind to solve potential problems that leads us to be confused. Therefore, being more skilled with the help of increased amount of information related to that field of study helps us to be more organized instead of forcing us in a chaotic environment. For instance, from the beginning of the history space has been an mysterious to work on. There were so many individuals who devoted themselves on the space science. However, due to the lack of enough information, society assumed that the earth is flat without using any scientific observation, which created a crucial social structure that didn't allow scientists to work on. When an individual observed that the earth isn't actually flat, that individual was isolated from the society. It was a completely mysterious area. On the other hand, when the information gathered from the environment increased with the help of development of required tools which have been also made thanks to the acquired knowledge, the reality has become obvious for the society. As a result, more comprehensive scientific activities have been made possible. That is not to say that the knowledge always lead us to be more organized. There may still be lack of required knowledge, although the information gathered increased. However, this may be overcomed with the help of curiosity. When the society is able to understand the fundamental parts of the systems, the studies and the structures which benefit from understanding of these systems will be more comprehensive.
At the same time, high complexity of the real systems continuously arises new problems for the humankind. Therefore, acquired knowledge may be insufficient to organize well-structured studies. For instance, although the main principles of the engines have been known, the cars have been possible to use after many years. Since the nature of the systems lead us to face with new problems, acquired knowledge is not sufficient alone. However, continuous effort of gaining information would lead us to have comprehensive structures.
Though many feel that the world has such a byzantine place that makes it impossible to be organized. The skills of humankind which continue to develop made it meaningful and will make it easy to understand. As a result, comprehensive way of understanding the environment is possible with the help of interaction between pervasively observed environment.
- The main benefit of the study of history is to dispel the illusion that people living now are significantly different from people who lived in earlier times Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement 66
- Governments should place few if any restrictions on scientific research and development 75
- As we acquire more knowledge things do not become more comprehensible but more complex and mysterious Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take 66
- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college 66
- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college 94
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1164, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'electrons'' or 'electron's'?
Suggestion: electrons'; electron's
...s have faced while they were working on electrons movement didnt occured because of high ...
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Line 1, column 1183, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...they were working on electrons movement didnt occured because of high amount of infor...
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Line 1, column 1248, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: weren't
...high amount of information, since there werent enough information and experimental cap...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...abilities during that times, scientists couldnt end the discussion by observing reality...
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Line 2, column 361, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...beginning of the history space has been an mysterious to work on. There were so ma...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...created a crucial social structure that didnt allow scientists to work on. When an in...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...n an individual observed that the earth isnt actually flat, that individual was isol...
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Line 3, column 531, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ad us to have comprehensive structures. Though many feel that the world has such a byz...
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Line 4, column 8, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun feel seems to be countable; consider using: 'many feels'.
Suggestion: many feels
... have comprehensive structures. Though many feel that the world has such a byzantine pla...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, well, while, for instance, as a result, in other words, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.3162921348 212% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 94.0 58.6224719101 160% => OK
Nominalization: 31.0 12.9106741573 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3223.0 2235.4752809 144% => OK
No of words: 596.0 442.535393258 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40771812081 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94096258147 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07576056072 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 215.323595506 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.442953020134 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1008.9 704.065955056 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 3.10617977528 354% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.2370786517 148% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 60.8010325205 60.3974514979 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.433333333 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8666666667 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 5.21951772744 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 5.13820224719 214% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144336236123 0.243740707755 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0412695826949 0.0831039109588 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0355163354265 0.0758088955206 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.086932601985 0.150359130593 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0437151790386 0.0667264976115 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 100.480337079 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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