Knowledge is the base of human existence. All the comfort and advancement in technology is achieved through people who had questioned the existing norms. They went beyond the conventional ways and tried to dive deep through the ocean of knowledge. It is due to the curiosity of these people that mankind was able to reach moon, invent airplanes and much more. Though, there are times when one might feel they are stuck in a loop but there is always light at the end of the tunnel.
There is no limit for knowledge and not everyone of the same profession are on same level of it. In my opinion, when people are trying to acquire knowledge on a new subject, they are compelled to feel lost. There might be a point where they want to quit because things start to become more complex and mysterious rather than comprehensible. In order to support my opinion I would like to give a real life example. In today's world students are the one who are trying hard to acquire as much knowledge as possible in their field of interest. A student when undergoes the transition from high school senior to fresher in university, things start to get a bit rough. You are expected to perform well in all your course subjects along with having a good balance with extra curricular activities. Students tend to feel around the middle of their semesters that subjects are becoming more complex as the course is moving ahead rather than comprehensible. Still, towards the end through hard-work, determination and persistance they are able to achieve a good understanding of many subjects. Thus, proving that when one tries to learn new things there are difficulties one might face but there is always a light of hope.
Another example I would like to state is of an enterpreneur, who is trying hard to figure out things for the growth of her enterprise. In this case the enterpreneur needs to have a good understanding of the market before launching her product or service. She needs to have knowledge of people's mindset, their financial status and about her competitor companines. All this at once might turn out to be really overwhelming. Still in today's time we see a lot of successful enterprenuers one such being Steve Job who started out a company like Apple and through his experience shaped the company towards the most successful company of all time. Another such example is of Mark Zukerberg who is the founder of famous Facebook.
Thus I would like to conclude my opinion by stating,"The more knowledge you gain the more comprehensible the things become", one might just need to have paitence through their learning curve.
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- TOEFL T P O 11 Integrated Writing Task 52
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 214, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... have a good understanding of the market before launching her product or service....
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Line 3, column 424, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Still,
...ght turn out to be really overwhelming. Still in todays time we see a lot of successf...
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Line 3, column 526, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...one such being Steve Job who started out a company like Apple and through his exp...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...who is the founder of famous Facebook. Thus I would like to conclude my opinion by ...
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Line 4, column 52, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , &apos
...d like to conclude my opinion by stating,'The more knowledge you gain the more co...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, really, still, thus, well, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2173.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 451.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81818181818 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79801531985 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518847006652 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.3445261191 60.3974514979 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.7727272727 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.22727272727 5.21951772744 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163738769547 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0426149207173 0.0831039109588 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0557195167748 0.0758088955206 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111143170577 0.150359130593 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.079567644665 0.0667264976115 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 100.480337079 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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