Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
As a teenager, elders would constantly preach sermons to me about how it was “high time” I started planning for my future, that is, a very practical, lucrative future. I would simply wander off into my own thoughts, dreaming of crowd surfing and signing autographs, no matter how whimsical the concept seemed at the time. Only now do I understand the perspectives of the adults who surrounded me. While I understand that there may be limitations to this argument, I strongly agree with the prompt’s suggestion that the youth should be encouraged to pursue realistic, long-term goals for two reasons.
To begin, personal satisfaction is often the result of years of hard work and goal setting- fame and stardom may provide one with immediate gratification, but that happiness is fleeting, dissipating as quickly as it arrived. In fields like academia or politics, people are more likely to reap the fruits of their labor following several years of experience. An undergraduate Neurobiology student bogged down by her foreign language, and humanities credits will, most likely, not be able to make a shocking breakthrough by investigating Schizophrenia Loci. Under the guidance of senior researchers and professors, and have accumulated many years of experience, she will be able to successfully complete her dissertation and obtain her Ph.D. on the Variants of Schizophrenia Loci, and eventually, go on to become a renowned professor herself. Thus, long-term goals, needless to say, take a long time to achieve, but in doing so, one can ensure their lasting success, should they put the hard work into reaching them.
Further, even if we were to assume that one is the most sedulous workaholic, success is largely determined by a complex factor: luck. Even more so when trying to achieve fame, luck is not so easy to come by - if it were, everyone would be famous and so the concept of stardom would be entirely diminished! Consider Hollywood pop singer Shawn Mendes, who has sold millions of records worldwide at the age of 22. His rise to fame can be attributed to his “accidental” discovery on Vine, a social media app, by the manager of a large record label. Having his talents recognized amongst the hundreds of thousands of equally talented artists on the app was, indeed, fortuitous for Mendes, but for every successful pop star, there exists a myriad of struggling musicians. Ultimately, these musicians may be unable to pay their rent, wishing that they hadn’t turned down the desk job they were offered after graduating college.
It should, however, be considered that it may be worthwhile in some scenarios to seek instant fame. Take sports, for example, athletes tend to be at the apex of their career when it just about begins - they are healthy and perform their best when they are young and fit. Working hard to seek recognition at the onset of an athlete’s career would allow for him/her to benefit from the resources immediately available, to further advance his career prospects and potentially expand his talents to other fields. Kobe Bryant, for example, was a basketball player drafted to the NBA immediately after graduating high school. His success as an eminent basketball player followed shortly after, and he retired comfortably at 38, an age which most peoples’ careers haven't even taken full form yet! Following his retirement, he set up a non-profit organization, made music, and handled several business ventures as well. Though he was conventionally “successful”, we cannot assume that everyone who seeks similar success will be blessed with a similar fate.
In conclusion, I do strongly agree that planning for the future and creating realistic goals are more worthwhile than immediate fame, as this is what is most profitable for the average person. It is impossible to predict who may rise to stardom, but if you are one of the lucky ones, unless you put in the effort to remain relevant, your fame may likely be short-lived.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, thus, well, while, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.5258426966 174% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 33.0505617978 188% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 58.6224719101 138% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3336.0 2235.4752809 149% => OK
No of words: 655.0 442.535393258 148% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09312977099 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.05894927669 4.55969084622 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91778320853 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 378.0 215.323595506 176% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577099236641 0.4932671777 117% => OK
syllable_count: 1026.0 704.065955056 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.77640449438 507% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.6527077486 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.636363636 118.986275619 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.7727272727 23.4991977007 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.27272727273 5.21951772744 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207183441421 0.243740707755 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0558021637026 0.0831039109588 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556368516079 0.0758088955206 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116758935453 0.150359130593 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052304820311 0.0667264976115 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 14.1392134831 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.8420337079 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.75 8.38706741573 116% => OK
difficult_words: 194.0 100.480337079 193% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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