The diagrams show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.
The diagrams illustrate the plan for changes the school site for twenty years later by comparison the school site in 2004 and 2024.
The school site in 2004 had two school buildings, one sport field and one car park beside the main entrance. The number of student in the school in 2004 had just 600 students. Next, the plan for build the school site will develop and they ready to build.
The plan of school site in 2024 will be build three school buildings. The first building and the second building are located in the same place but the third building will be locate in sport field. The sport field will be move to other side near the forest. The car park will be build in two sides of the school. The first car park is located beside main entrance then the second car park will be increase to 1000 students. That will be almost twice of number of student in 2004.
In conclusion, the plan for change the school site relate with the large of school so many student will come with the increasing number of total student. I think by adding more number of buildings and facilities will provide the student to study more comfortable.
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Sentence: In conclusion, the plan for change the school site relate with the large of school so many student will come with the increasing number of total student.
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I think by adding more number of buildings and facilities will provide the student to study more comfortable.
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