In contemporary society, as the health condition has been facilitated, people's life expectancy is longer than ever before. Many people insist on the view that according to this phenomenon, the retirement age should be extended. As far as I am concerned, I do not agree with this contention, and I will justify my reasons below.
Firstly, the unemployment of graduates is one of the most pressing issues in today's world. If, for example, there will be less job opportunities released due to postponement of retirement, so that the sheer number of graduates might not be able to find a job. This w...
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