WRITING TASK 1You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar graph below shows the numbers of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia in the year 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make co

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WRITING TASK 1
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The bar graph below shows the numbers of employed persons by job type and
sex for Australia in the year 2003.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make
comparisons where relevant.
You should write at least 150 words.

The bar graph illustrates the numbers of males and females employed in different types of jobs in Australia in the year 2003. It is clearly seen that the number of people employed in different types of jobs varies significantly between males and females.

For males, highest number of people was employed as tradepersons and clerks, with almost 900 000 people each job. There was 650 000 people employed as professionals, closely followed by managers (about 610 000 people). Semi professionals and production sectors had about 500 000 employees, and the least number of people words as labourers (...

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